Foundation – English & Writing (Part 2)

A new Poem

so we’re gonna jump into this next poem, which is on Eve Merriam to people. Now some of you guys might have seen Eve Miriam’s poems before. If you watch if you read, you know how to eat a poem. You guys would have read this before. But nonetheless, we’re going to go through this in order to help you guys really understand what this is about. So we have the poem to people which He reads the paper, which he turns whilst he turns on TV. She likes the mountains. he craves the sea. What do you think this is about? Comment down below guys.

What do you think this is about? Again, comment down below if you want to stand and we’re going to explain it together

Okay, excellent. So someone’s already said two different people have two different things, right? They like two different things. Excellent. Excellent. So she reads the paper, or he turns on the TV. She likes the mountains. he craves the seat. So in other words, you know, someone likes nature, right? Some likes paid about the other person likes TV. Someone’s likes to write newspaper. The other person likes to watch TV. She likes mountains he likes to see so they’re complete opposites in terms of what they like. He’d rather drive she’ll take the plane. Again opposites she waits for Sun he waves sunshine she walks into the rain. He gulps down hot cold drinks she slips on hot so Goffstown has drinks really quickly cold drinks. She slips on hot he asks why go she asks why not? And just about everything they disagree. They love one another and they both love me. What is the meaning of the story? Comment down below guys. What is the deeper meaning in this story between these people one liking to do this the other one likes to do that. One person likes cold drinks the other person likes hot. What is the deeper meaning here? Comment down below guys see the catch line in the last sentence? 

What is the main idea of this poem?

What is the last sentence say comment down below? So they are different they antagonist very good. And in other words, the ending is that they both love me. So they’re both my parents. And because of that that’s the only similarity that they have. Okay, that is the catch. Comment down below if you understand that it says and just about everything they disagree. They love one another and they love me. And so it’s saying pretty much that love prevails over everything. It doesn’t matter if you’re different as long as you love each other. You guys will be okay. Okay, comment down below if you guys understand. So love conquers everything. Everybody write that down Love conquers everything.

Brilliant. Okay, so we’re gonna jump on to the next one. And hopefully you guys are following so we can focus. So, we’re gonna go into a little bit of the next passage right now, this is going to be the last one that we go through today. And then your homework will be to do a lot of poetry for me as homework. Okay, so we’re gonna jump into the flint right now. Comment down below if you guys see the Flint. Let’s focus. So what is this Flint about? I’m gonna give you guys a couple of seconds to read this. And it tells me what the main idea is.

Good, I’m going to give you a couple of seconds. And then I want you to tell me what the story of this poem. What is the main idea of this poem? Comment down below guys. What is the main idea of this poem? What’s going on? And then we’re going to finish off with a little bit of writing.

Let’s have a look at this last one, the Flint. And let’s focus. So yeah, it’s all about the colors of different stones, right? It’s saying the Emerald is as green as Grace, the Ruby, red as blood. The Sapphire shines as blue as heaven. Correct. They are about gems. Everybody writes down. This is about gems. Right? Emerald is the very top of expensive gym. Ruby is very expensive gym, but it says a flat lies in the mud. Now you guys might be wondering, Steven, what on earth is a flit? Let’s talk about it. A flint is something that you use to make fire. Okay, so it’s type of material that you have, that you use to make fire. Okay, so it’s kind of like this. It’s very ugly, kind of jewel, but it’s very useful. And so it’s saying the Emerald is as green as grass, ruby red as blood. sapphires. Sean’s blue is heaven. All of these things are so beautiful. Right? Everybody write that down. All of these things are so beautiful. They’re green, they’re red. They’re so colorful. And yet, the flat lies in the mud. The flips is ugly. 

Everybody write this down. When it says lies in the mud. It’s ugly, it’s worn down. Nobody really likes to flip comment down below if you guys understand. Nobody really likes the flips. But then in the next bit, read the next one. It says the diamond is a brilliant stone to catch the world societal. And Opal holds a fiery Spock but a flint holds fire. So comment down below again, what is the main idea all of these things are so beautiful. And yet they are not useful. And so that’s the main idea here. Okay, all of these things are so beautiful. And yet they are not that useful. Whereas the fire or the flit itself is able to create fire, which is obviously a very, very useful thing, something which has a lot of practical value. So again, what we’re gonna do is gonna go into whatever we’re gonna type in the word useful. And you guys are going to try to find some synonyms for useful comment down below. So we have the word practical. We got the word functional, we got the word convenient, utilitarian, purposeful, all of these are very good words to use. Everybody have a look. 

So practical, functional, utilitarian, purposeful, serviceable, neat, convenient. All these words mean useful. And so the main idea is not really about the other jewels. But it’s all more about how the flip is useful. So again, a lot of you guys got this interpretation wrong. You guys thought it was about the jewels. It’s not about the jewels. It’s about the usefulness or the utility of the fleet. That’s the main idea here. Okay, that’s the most important idea.

What’s going to happen when we jump into the passages.

Okay, brilliant, brilliant work. So excellent walk us. We’re going to do right now is going to jump into the rest. Okay, so pretty much this is what’s going to happen every single time when we jump into the passages, I will analyze the difficult passages, and then you will need to do homework. Okay. So you will need to make sure that you answer the questions, the questions from the homework will be kind of different to the to the passages that we’ve already gone through, right, but you will still be tested on these passages at some point during the time. Okay, so everybody write that down. I go through the passages. You guys get through the homework. Any homework question that you don’t understand, we’ll cover up over the weekend. 

We’re going to do right now is we’re going to write a story. We’re going to do some writing. And we’re going to do some writing on this picture that we have here. I want everybody looks at this picture right here. And we’re going to write a little bit of a narrative on this picture. So before we start thinking about this picture, or before we start thinking about writing a narrative on this picture, the first thing that I want you guys to write down, and everybody write down the word writing we’re going to shift into writing from out is, what do you see? And how can we use our five senses to describe this picture? So everybody write down the word five, seven, says, and how can we use our five senses to describe this picture? Comment down below what you guys see in this picture.

Okay, so I see some people already commenting some stuff, which is great. What I want to start with is I want to start with what we see. Okay, so let’s start with what we see. So let’s start with sight, right? What do we see here? We see trees, we see leaves, we see trees on buildings. And then we also see open windows, right? And we also see branches and we see a lot of green. Coming down below if you guys see that, sometimes of sight we see trees, buildings, window, green.

Excellent. Now, as I teach you guys writing, I’m gonna teach you guys how to write like, crazy kids, right? Like right at a very, very high level. Now the way that you’re gonna write at a very, very high level, is you’re going to use the best friend Word Hippo so everybody write this down? Best friend, is word Hippo? Okay? So I’m going to teach you guys how to do this. yourself, right? Let’s say you want to describe a tree. Okay, so here we have a tree, right? The way that we’re going to use to describe the tree is we’re going to use some colors to describe the trees, branches. So let’s type in the word green. Okay, let’s type in the word green. On what happened. Let’s try to find some some words, which are similar to green. So here we have words like greenish, we have the word aqua, olive, Jade, Apple, green, malice sites, moss, green, pine green. And so you started using these words to describe your trade. So I’ll probably use the word Jade, green tree. And then you want to think about how did how was the gray tree moving? What didn’t seem like was a towering? Was it moving? Was it growing? What kind of verb can we use? So jade green, green Green Tree slithered inside the old building. 

So let’s describe the old building let’s just write the jade green traits slithered inside the old building. Now let’s look at the word old. The word old is a bit too simple, right? So let’s not use the word old. Let’s type in the word old onto word hippo. Let’s try to find a better way. So instead of older we can write down the word age. We could write down the word ancients. we’d write down the word only use was you know, okay, so you could write, dilapidated or decayed all of these mean, when something is kind of a big mess or ruined or shaky or tottering. Comment down below if you guys see some emotions here that you can use. Excellent. So some people are going crazy. So here you can write shabby, dilapidated building. Comment down below if you guys see that. So at the very beginning, all I’m going to ask you to do is just write sentences, right? So you only need to write sentences. You don’t need to write actual paragraphs. 

Everybody write this down. So only write sentences and for homework, you guys will only need to write sentences. So every look at this jade green tree slithered inside the lapidated shabby building. Jade grain Srei slithered inside the shabby, dilapidated building. I want everybody to copy this down. Copy it down. Very, very important. Okay, copy down first and then we’ll talk about some other stuff. But it’s very important that you guys copy it down first.

Describing the buildings.

Okay, we’re gonna jump into the next bit. Yeah. The next thing that we want to describe is want to describe the buildings, okay? And again, we’re going to follow like a similar kind of method. So we just write down the word buildings, because that’s going to be the verb that’s going to be the noun that we talked about. And again, we want to describe the color of the building. Right? So what kind of color do we see here with the building? Kind of see that it’s like a grayish color. It’s like a brownish color color. And again, you gotta go to your best friend, which is what hippo and you type in The word gray. Okay, type in the word gray. And you see different types of gray. Right? You have pale gray, your silver, your gray, your smoke Gray, your slight gray, I’ll probably write down the word slight gray, okay, or gunmetal gray, any of those are fine. So you could write something along the lines of this swatch. So you could write the SUTI Gray Building was covered.

In graffiti, so you can make that up. The sooty Gray Building was covered in graffiti. So again, what we can do here is we can write down the word sooty gray. And we can write down the word graffiti. And we can find some words to describe the graffiti right. So we know the graffiti is generally pretty rude. So you could write down the word rude. You could write impudence. You could write disrespectful, crass, blunt. So let’s write that down. Let’s let’s put that down what’s covered in crass graffiti.

And broken glass windows, everybody writes down. So the SUTI Gray Building was covered and crass graffiti, and broken glass windows. So we’re starting off very, very easy. Like most of you guys should be capable of writing sentences like this. Now let me show you guys how to go a little bit more crazy. And do this in a better way. So instead of writing the word covered, covered is a bit of a simple word. So let’s just type in the word cover. Again, on what HIPAA and let’s see what what we can get. So we have the word protected bind it disguise facade blanketed I would probably use what blanketed so I would write down the word blanketed in crass graffiti and broken glass windows. That’s what I would write here for the buildings come down below if you guys understand. Next one that we have, we can describe the the bricks threat. So let’s say we want to describe the bricks. Again, we just write a very simple sentence about bricks. Again, you want to describe the bricks as being what worn down. So you could write broken bricks. So let’s type in the word broken. onto what hippo here we have the word demolished. We got the word seventh. We got the word ruptured. splinted snapped, crumbled. So everybody, let’s write this down. Let’s write down the color of the brick again, same thing. So you could write the slate gray bricks, right crumbled in. Now, this is where I’m gonna go a little bit crazy. So instead of just writing crumbled, all right crumbled in neglect. And for lawn Despit. Okay, everybody write this down. Just copy it down for now. And I’ll teach you guys how to actually do this. So what I’ve done here, is I’ve just added an emotion. Comment down below if you guys see this emotion. So I’ve just added a little bit of an emotion. I’ve just put it in I just put in the word slight gray bricks crumbled in for lawn Despit. Another word for full on despair is just sadness, right? So the slight gray bricks, crumble in sadness. That’s all I’m doing here. Okay, comment down below if you guys understand. Copy it down first. And then we’ll talk about how to actually write sentences like this so that you guys will know what to do later on.

So here, slight gray bricks crumbled in forlorn despair. Now let’s go through the sentence structure. And let’s go through how to actually write out these sentences. Each sentence follows the same structure in which you have a noun, then you have a verb and then you have a another noun. So now number two second now. Okay, so you got a noun, you got a verb and then your second noun, right so here we have the jade green trait, which is the first noun slew that inside the shabby, dilapidated building second noun, right? So slithered is It’s just the verb here comment down below if you guys say that slow that is just the about next one city Gray Building was blanketed and crass graffiti and broken glass windows. Again we have a noun which is Su T Gray Building, right. So we have the building and then we got the blanketed and crass graffiti blanketed is the verb. And cress graffiti is the second noun. Second, the third one that we have a slight gray bricks crumbled in for lawn despair. So crumbling is again your verb. And your second noun is just the full lawn Despit. Comment down below if you guys understand what I’m talking about. Okay, see you now and you’ve up and then you second down. You need to make sure that you are describing everything so everybody write this down. Every single noun has an adjective, okay? Very, very important. Let me just make a new one. Every now has an adjective. Okay, everybody rather than every noun has an adjective

What can you smell? What can you hear? What do you taste?

so what I want you guys to do right now is have a go at writing your own sentence. Okay, I want you guys all have a go at writing your own sentence. And I’ll take a look at what you guys are doing. Look at this picture. And now write your own sentence. What can you see? What can you smell maybe talk about some of the smell. So you could smell the rotten smoke, congesting the buildings or clogging up the buildings. What can you hear? Talk about what you hear. You can hear the traffic noise, right, the thumps you know slamming or brakes or screaming the shouting tell me what you can hear. The other thing that we can talk about is tell me what you can taste. Right now this is a bit difficult. But tell me what you could taste in the air. I want you guys to have a go at writing one sentence about this picture. So everybody have a go right now write one sentence. Copy what I’ve done. And we’re going to have a good.

One guys write something about the building. So maybe you want to talk about the windows, right? Think about the windows. You could say the windows were covered in cockroaches. Right? And then if you want to describe that, you will just try to find some adjectives for the windows, right? So instead of writing the word broken, you would write the shattered window was COVID. In or teeming with mosquitoes, then you want to describe mosquitoes. You’d write down the word annoying. Some mosquitoes annoying right? So you just try to find another word for annoying right? So irritating mosquitoes or bothersome mosquitoes. Comment down below if you guys understand that’s what you need to do. Or displeasing mosquitos. Again all of these are possibilities of things that you can write comment down below if you guys understand comment down below if you guys click

Comment down below if you guys understand comment down below if you guys click OK someone’s already written some stuff deteriorates light gray buildings will making a smell smoke. Brilliant. Good walk us I can taste the fresh morning afternoon night air the room was covered in moss. Excellent. I hear the wind blowing like a tornado. Excellent work. So brilliant. Brilliant work us. Now. Let’s talk about how to make this big boy right because right now you guys are still little kids. Right? You guys still writing like the three kids. Comment down below who wants to write like a big boy or big girl. Comment down below if you want to beat your older sibling beat your older brother, your older sister out writing. So simple thing is where you have just a noun or a verb and then a second noun. The crazy way or the big boy big girl version is where you put in an emotion. Okay, this is where it starts going a little bit Christ. So instead of writing the J green tree, you could write something like the jade green tree withered away in full lawn. 

Abandon mix. Okay, everybody look at that. So in other words, I’m saying that it’s withering away that it’s dying in for lawn abandonment. What I’ve done here is I placed an emotion. Alright. You could say the wind. Instead of just describing it as a wind. You could describe it as the terrifying winds. How, right again, how with blind rage out the cowering Building everybody around the dump. So a very simple way of doing it. All we’re doing here is we’re putting in an emotion, right, everybody write this down. If you want to be a big deal, big boy, you just write down the word emotion. Right? And then by putting in an emotion, you can really make this come to life, right? So instead of just writing the jade green tree, with it, away. Instead of saying the grade, jade green tree slithered into another building, we’re saying that with it away, with abandonment, or you could say the terrifying wind howled with blind rights blind rage here is Z, emotion comment down below guys on set. So we’re giving emotions to these different things. We could also write down the window, the window side, full of sadness. 

As no customers came in the shop, everybody about the step, the window side full of sadness, as no customers came in the shop, what are we doing here, all we’re doing is putting in an emotion. Okay, we put the window was full of a full of full of sadness, as no customers came into the shop. And you could you could describe everything as being sad, you can describe everything as being unhappy. And well some other ways of describing sad you don’t worry about which is your best friend, you try to find some other words for sad, sorrowful, miserable, mourn for upset depressed, the window side full of depression, as no customers came in the shop. Let me give you guys some other examples of what you can do. You can right the tree the tree weeps with sadness, or you could write a weight with misery.

So here we go. Again, what I’ve described is the tray weep, so the tray was crying. Comment down below if you guys see that. The tray was crying with sadness, as wilting leaves as leaves that were just about to fall off, started to go down, right? fell to the barren ground. Comment down below if you guys understand what’s going on here. All I’m doing is I’m putting in a couple of emotions here and there to help you guys really understand how to do this. Okay, so for this week, what I’m going to ask you guys to do is to write a little bit of a story on this thing right here. Okay? What I’ll ask you to do is write a couple of different sentences, describing the trees describing the buildings surrounding the windows describing the different formations that we have here. And also, I’ll be posting a link up to whatever so that you guys can all use that. And make sure that you finish that for me. Okay, once you finish it, you guys just need to make sure that you upload it into the workplace. Okay. Excellent. Excellent work. Brilliant. Okay, so the homework is gonna go up in approximately five minutes. Make sure that you get the homework done by Wednesday, because Wednesday is going to be our next lesson. And I’ll see you guys all very soon. Comment down below who’s enjoyed today’s class, who likes the format who enjoys reading and writing? Again, I look forward to seeing you guys all very very soon. And I’ll see you guys on Wednesday. Bye.

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