Week 5 Writing Homework
Prompt:
Write 10 sentences about your interactions with a painting of a pirate ship that comes to life. Use the examples and formula to describe touching the water in a pirate painting, observing the scene, listening to the pirates, and feeling the atmosphere. Make sure you show how these interactions make you feel and what happens around you.
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- Due Date : March 15, 2025
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Thousands of paintings scattered around the gallery like hidden homes. Just one of them got my mind twisting and turning. There was this exquisite painting of an extraordinary pirate ship sailing above the horizon. It was a painting of a pirate ship! It had white sails the colour of the moon winking at the dark sky saying goodbye to the sun preparing for another stormy night. The angry sea getting more and more hazardous was getting its game up getting some sort of revenge on the pirate ship like it was attacking it to its death. It was an entertaining but peculiar picture.
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Thousands of paintings scattered around the gallery like hidden homes. Just one of them got my mind twisting and turning. There was this exquisite painting of an extraordinary pirate ship sailing above the horizon. It was a painting of a pirate ship! It had white sails the colour of the moon winking at the dark sky saying goodbye to the sun preparing for another stormy night. The angry sea getting more and more hazardous was getting its game up, getting some sort of revenge on the pirate ship like it was attacking it to its death. The clouds closing in on the ship so that once it was ready, they were going to pop. The solitary hunter of the ocean was the only source of light there. No other ship dared to sail a ship on the Drake Passage, especially at this time. It was interesting but peculiar picture.
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Y4_RC[WK5] – Arjun Palraj
In the gallery of pirate ship paintings each one gave me a vision of what it would look like if it where real. I stoped by the largest painting. Suddenly, Iwas sucked into the longest vision. It made scence scince it was the largest. Then,I found mysels on a deck of a pirate ship. Every one was screaming at once as if the ship was sinking. “What a minute,” I thought I thought “The ship is sinking.” Soon I found myself screaming my head of. I was terrified. The waves smashed into the ship and people fell over board. I tried escaping the vision but it was no use. Finally after what felt like etiernity I eccaped.
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Y4_RC[WK5] – Eric Li