Day 3 Writing Homework
Prompt : Write a suspenseful narrative (200-300 words) about three students discovering a sealed tin lunchbox in a storm-lashed school attic, exploring its mysterious contents and their significance. Your response should include:
Vivid characters: Craft three distinct characters with clear internal traits (e.g., motivations, fears) and external cues (e.g., speech patterns, body language), inspired by the document’s exemplars (Holly, Naveed, Lila).
Atmospheric setting: Create a dynamic, sensory-rich attic environment that amplifies tension (e.g., storm effects, creaking floorboards).
Symbolic element: Include a symbolic object (e.g., the lunchbox or its contents) that evolves in meaning, reflecting a theme like memory, secrecy, or history’s impact.
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- Due Date : July 11, 2025
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Bib, Bob and Bab are triplets, and they go to B Public School, which only enrols students with names starting with the letter B. Bib, the eldest sibling, is a scaredy cat and is afraid of the slightest sound one can hear. This is the opposite of Bob, the youngest of them three, who likes challenges and is not afraid of anything in the world. Unfortunately for Bab, who doesn’t care about anything at all, is always in conflict with his two brothers’ decisions.
One day, while the triplets were in school, a huge tornado swept across the school causing the ten-story building to shake uncontrollably. Bib, Bab, and Bob happened to be in the computer lab, on the top floor of the building, for detention. As expected, Bib crawled under the desk with his eyes closed and hands covering his ears, whilst Bob eagerly peeked out the computer lab window to see what happened. Soon after, a thunderous CRASH! BOOM! BANG! was heard from the ceiling of the computer lab. In the corner of the room, a hidden attic entrance was also revealed. Taking the opportunity, Bob excitedly exclaimed, “Let’s check out the attic!”. Bib disagreed and Bab didn’t know what to say or do. Convinced, both Bob and Bab later dragged Bib to the attic to see what was happening.
As the three entered the storm-lashed attic, they noticed a lot of spider webs hanging around old tin boxes, which were scattered all over the floor. However, a glowing sealed tin lunchbox that was in the middle of the room caught Bib’s attention, causing him to hide behind Bab. Without a thought, Bob decided to pry open the sealed lunchbox. Just as he opened the tin, a blindingly bright white light shone through the room and the three siblings found themselves back in the computer lab, at the start of detention!
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Y4RW_D3 – Adelasia Seng
Detective Dog was staring at the table leg, it had fox teeth marks on it, “Mr. Frady stole the cake.” he spoke. Detective Dog was like the new Sherlock homes. On Friday, the 17th of March 2025 Detective Dog had a case solved. Have you seen the great wall of China talk, well Detective Dog will.
That day he was already having a bad day he stubbed his toe on the traffic light and when he was just planning to go to the park in started raining. When he sat to relax the phone rang! Mr. Bear was calling to tell him that his museum just got robbed. The robber robbed a ancient map of the great wall of China, it had where the soldiers stood, and it had the history of it. The museum had been a place for schools to learn about the great wall of China but without its map no one will want to come there. Mr. Bear was hopeless.
Detective Dog hatched a plan to find it. He knew that the map got out by itself because there was no broken glass anywhere. “To the great wall of China!” said the detective. When they reached there, they saw the map merging with the great wall of China. “Wait!” Mr. Bear yelled. “What do you want?” replied a booming voice. “Can we borrow the map please.” said Dog politely. When they got the map, the skies cleared to let a beaming light come thru. They photocopied it and putted it back in its display. The museum was as busily as it was, and Dog got to relax.
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Y4RW_D3 – Ira Bisht
Draconite was a villian who killed Marvelo’s Dad when He was just 6 months old. Marvelo’s mum died 3 weeks after that, so Marvelo was an orphan. He is now living with his godfather, who is as kind as his dad. Behind that hair and moustache, wore a very kind smile when ever Marvelo came home. Marvelo had a huge scar that went across his face from what Draconite gave him, so he covered it up with foundation(so embarrasing) and so that Draconite dosen’t know it’s really the one baby he couldn’t defeat. Let’s rewind to power academia, where there are auditions for the magic team. There are four magic abilities, teleportation ,gravity, muscle magic, and slow motion magic. Marvelo has teleportation magic, so he has a chance of getting in. One day, when Marvelo was in his dormitory, playing with his best friends, Bianca, and Auren, the Dorm teacher called Marvelo to come with her…. to the principles office! The principle is strict but fair, so the chances of him smiling is very rare. Regulus Mulberry, wasn’t there to scream at Marvelo, he was there to give Marvelo a quest to find his sword. Marvelo straight away rushed to the store room, and he saw a flickering golden light, and took it. Suddenly, it spread warmth all over his hand. He had done it. He has proven to be loyal. Like harry potter he is a lot like gryffindor, but he has some hufflepuff in him.
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Y4-RW_D3 – Ragini
In a family, there were three children one girl and two boys. The girl’s name was Sophie and the boys’ names were William and Hugo. The eldest child, Hugo liked to expand his curiosity by exploring something new everyday. The youngest child, Sophie is directly opposite to Hugo as she was scared of even a small ant 50 centimeters away from her. William was somewhere in between.
One cloudy, dim day at Vanuatu Primary School, the three students were working on a science project in the Homes Room when they suddenly heard a lightning and thunder in the attic. Immeadiately, Hugo was eager to persuade Sophie into the attic but she would not budge. So, Hugo and William left her behind and went into the attic by themselves. Inside, they found themselves gazing at a storm-lashed tin lunchbox.
Excited, Hugo decided to forcefully open the lunchbox and inside, they observed at a rectangular plate that had three buttons on it. The buttons said: ‘Kiribati’, ‘Marshall Islands’ and ‘Montserrat’.Each of them did a vote that which one they should press. Hugo insisted to press ‘Montserrat’ but William said that they should press ‘Kiribati’. William’s second favourite button is Montserrat. So, they both agreed on pressing it.
“3, 2, 1!”
Both of the students pressed it at the same time. Then they were teleported to this tropical-looking island but it seemed like they travelled back in time. To the time were the volcano on Montserrat eurpted! The two children obviously didn’t know that. They waded to shore and walked to the mountain (this was the volcano) and rested on the edge of it. About one minute later, there were a few little rumbles and finally, the volcano erupted! William told Hugo that the volcano is erupting and says that they must go south for their survival. They ran as fast as they can and jumped into a hole which teleported them back to the buttons.
Hugo might be the bravest but certainly not the smartest. Back at the buttons, they now had two choices: Kiribati and Marshall Islands. Hugo knew that Kiribati was used for bombing by both US and UK. They agreed to press the other one. After they pressed it, it was back to normal, working on their science project with Sophie.
Clayne Day 3 – The Teen Lunch Box
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Y4-RW_D3 – Clayne