Week 1 Writing Homework
Writing Prompt: Write a story that begins in the middle of something exciting. It could be a fire alarm going off, a robot coming to life, or someone running from something mysterious. Don’t explain anything yet—just throw the reader straight into the scene! 400 words
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Boom! The ground shook beneath me. I stumbled, nearly falling into the ash covered slope. Behind me, the volcano screamed a deep, earth shattering roar that split the sky in two. It thundered ear splitting uproar and I felt like I was deaf. I didn’t look back. I couldn’t. Hot wind slammed into my back as I ran, every step crunching over cracked earth. The sky had turned a sickly grey, and hot ash rained down like burning snow. My throat felt like sandpaper. Each breath scorched my lungs, and my legs were turning to jelly, but the sound behind us kept pushing me forward. A deep, awful roar. The sound of the earth breaking apart.
The air stank of smoke and burnt matches, like rotten eggs and metal. I yelled, choking on ash, “Keep going! Don’t stop!” The world looked like a nightmare, like someone had erased all colour in the world and lit the sky on fire. A boulder, still glowing red, crashed metres away from me. Heat slapped my skin like a whip. My legs screamed for rest and I felt like I was going to collapse. My chest felt like it was going to jump out of me.
“There! A cave!” I pointed and cried to warn the others, running towards a jagged shadow in the rocks. We stumbled across clumps of smoking branches, our shoes nearly melting, and dove into the darkness. The heat followed us to the entrance. Inside, it was cool, silent. My heart pounded so hard I could hear it. The air tasted like damp rock and dust but it was much better than smoke and ash. I collapsed onto the stone floor, coughing, sweating and trembling. We could have died out there.
We listened. Something scratched in the darkness. It was not the volcano. It was something else.I turned on my torch. There was a shadow silhouetted in the distance. It was much more than just a human. I wasn’t sure which was more dangerous, the fire above us or the secret buried below. All I knew was we were not the only ones in the cave.
Schoarly Y4 T3 Wk1
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1-Y4_Schol-chasenew
CRASH!
The lab’s ceiling shattered as sparks rained down. Scarlet lights pulsed across the cracked floor, and the emergency siren howled through the thick, humming air.
“RUN!” Ava yelled, dragging Kai by the wrist as a mechanical arm burst through the debris behind them.
Metal claws clanged against the tile, slicing the corner of Ava’s jacket as she ducked into the hallway. The creature—a patchwork of steel plates and flickering wires—roared like a broken jet engine.
Kai didn’t dare look back. “WHAT IS THAT THING?” he shouted, panting as they sprinted down the corridor, dodging overturned chairs and fallen computers.
Ava didn’t answer. She just ran.
The hallway bent sharply, and the emergency doors at the far end began to slide shut—far too slowly. Ava shoved Kai ahead. “Go! I’ll hold it off!”
“No!” Kai screamed. “We go together!”
Behind them, the creature screeched and leapt forward, crashing through the walls like they were made of paper. Alarms blared louder. The air tasted like smoke and battery acid.
Ava turned, grabbed a fallen fire extinguisher, and hurled it at the monster’s chest. Boom! It exploded in a cloud of white mist, and for a second—just a second—it froze, whirring confusedly.
“Now!”
Kai dove through the closing doors just as Ava slid after him. The metal slammed shut, cutting the creature off with a final mechanical shriek.
Silence.
The hallway beyond was lit only by flickering red lights and the dim glow of EXIT signs. Ava leaned against the wall, gasping.
Kai stared at her. “What was that?”
“I don’t know,” Ava whispered, voice hoarse. “It wasn’t supposed to wake up. Not yet.”
Kai blinked. “Wait… You built it?”
She didn’t answer. Instead, she stood, eyes narrowing toward the end of the corridor. “We need to keep moving. If that thing overrode its sleep code, the others might too.”
Kai’s face went pale. “There are more?”
A low thud echoed in the distance. Then another.
Boom… boom… boom…
Ava grabbed his hand. “We need to get to the control room. Now.”
As they ran deeper into the underground complex, the floor trembled beneath their feet, and somewhere far behind, metal claws began to drag slowly across the walls.
The hunt had begun.
done.
WK1_Nanqiao_writing
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1-Y4_Schol-Nanqiao YU
Boom! As the canon fired at me. The three man with shiny bagles and old fasion cloths with five big letters on it. POLICE.
My ring in my pocket felt mad and more hard ripping off my pocket.
And the a bullet shot at me through my jacket. The breath was more heavy and wanted me to slow down.
But I can’t these man were chasing at me and I was the highway at a cold endless night.
My body was frozen like ice bumped on my body. The frozen cold wind roared thorugh my body like a wolf chasing me on a endless forest.
My heart started pounding even more, the man roaring and the helicopter in the sky lighting, trying to found me in the darkness. Trying to capture me my legs started driggling, the air was faster than before..
And a trap nearly sent me to heaven.
The cars were getting me and searching in the bushes to found me and then…
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1-Y4_Schol-Yiming Kong
Thud!Thud!Thud! The heavy,powerful footsteps were just behind me,and every step felt like a step towards death.My heart was pounding like a drum,and my legs felt like a hundred kilograms that I had to drag along.I snuck a quick glance at the rough,hard faces of my pursuers, dressed in camouflage uniforms and combat boots.I wheezed,gasping for breath as a rough hand grasped my shoulder and bundled me into a large sack.Then I heard dart being shot,and suddenly day turned into night ,and the whole world vanished into blackness darker than the deepest abyss in the ocean.
I blearily opened my eyes,and as i did,the shock of what had happened rebounded ,the horror of what had happened in the last few hours crashing down on me like a bucket of icy water.Or was it days?I had no way of knowing.I rubbed my eyes,trying to remember what had happened.The men…getting caught…the tranquilizer dart…All of it seemed too insane to be true.I quickly scanned the room i was in.A hard mattress with a pillow,a bucket in the corner,and a plate of hard bread and cheese on a small wooden table.My heart sank to the floor when I spotted thick metal bars with a triple padlock on the other side.Oh no.How was I ever going to get out of here?And as if to answer my question,I suddenly noticed a tiny whisper coming from the wall.
‘Hey! I know a way out!”It said. ‘Who are you?’ I whispered back.‘I’m Emmy.”she said.And to my very great surprise,a chunk of wall slid away to reveal a girl.She was skinny,with bright, green eyes the color of emeralds.She had freckles across her nose,and glossy,black,waist-length hair.She had a mischievous smile on her face.Without saying a word,she grabbed my hand and a piece of floor slid away to reveal a ladder that led down into a tunnel.Without thinking,I scrambled down the ladder and set off into the tunnel.
The tunnel was dark,mossy,and full of twists and turns.I now heartily wished that I had brought a flashlight.My legs shook with exhaustion.After a hour of walking,I thought I was going to die.But then,a ray of light beamed through.I scrambled up a second ladder,and ran far,far away,away from the brutal men and my prison.
THE END
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1-Y4_Schol-Alina Cai
Please find below homework writing by Alina
Thud!Thud!Thud! The heavy,powerful footsteps were just behind me,and every step felt like a step towards death.My heart was pounding like a drum,and my legs felt like a hundred kilograms that I had to drag along.I snuck a quick glance at the rough,hard faces of my pursuers, dressed in camouflage uniforms and combat boots.I wheezed,gasping for breath as a rough hand grasped my shoulder and bundled me into a large sack.Then I heard dart being shot,and suddenly day turned into night ,and the whole world vanished into blackness darker than the deepest abyss in the ocean.
I blearily opened my eyes,and as i did,the shock of what had happened rebounded ,the horror of what had happened in the last few hours crashing down on me like a bucket of icy water.Or was it days?I had no way of knowing.I rubbed my eyes,trying to remember what had happened.The men…getting caught…the tranquilizer dart…All of it seemed too insane to be true.I quickly scanned the room i was in.A hard mattress with a pillow,a bucket in the corner,and a plate of hard bread and cheese on a small wooden table.My heart sank to the floor when I spotted thick metal bars with a triple padlock on the other side.Oh no.How was I ever going to get out of here?And as if to answer my question,I suddenly noticed a tiny whisper coming from the wall.
‘Hey! I know a way out!”It said. ‘Who are you?’ I whispered back.‘I’m Emmy.”she said.And to my very great surprise,a chunk of wall slid away to reveal a girl.She was skinny,with bright, green eyes the color of emeralds.She had freckles across her nose,and glossy,black,waist-length hair.She had a mischievous smile on her face.Without saying a word,she grabbed my hand and a piece of floor slid away to reveal a ladder that led down into a tunnel.Without thinking,I scrambled down the ladder and set off into the tunnel.
The tunnel was dark,mossy,and full of twists and turns.I now heartily wished that I had brought a flashlight.My legs shook with exhaustion.After a hour of walking,I thought I was going to die.But then,a ray of light beamed through.I scrambled up a second ladder,and ran far,far away,away from the brutal men and my prison.
CLING! CLANG! CRASH! SCREECH!!! At the e – Mecha stadium, 2 giant roaring metariuses fought, dented, and scraped each other. Sending scraps flying into the air and piles of dust skimming through the crowd. Bzzt… bzzt… The lights flickered and then it was time, a blackout! Now, the stadium was full like billions of ants bustling around in a colossal space. Many screamed, “HELP, SOMEONES mmmmnnnm (Mumbling) “! Others were so scared they turned paler than frosty snow! Only the 2 metariuses stayed calm, stopped fighting and worked together. They were called erst -7 (Short name is rt) and fugn – 3 (Short name is fn) . Rt raced down a micro-sized hole and fn followed him (They can change sizes) through but also dug some brick and blocked the way for others. Rt smelled a scent up ahead (Good everything including smell). It smelt like toxic waste poured over poo mixed with hydrogen sulfide! Fn creeped slowly trying to find out what snuck into their secret stash-out! They then found out that the motogps have left all of that waste upon their snacks. It is an … ALERT!!! ALERT!!! , already said, emergency meeting! Fn and rt gathered up at the vents (Still in the stash-out). Fn discussed with Traffy (Ant assistant) that the motogps might have caused that fuss at the stadium today. Traffy agreed to help stop the cause but clean the stash-out first.
ZZZZT! ZZZZT! It was a motogp. It was shocked to see the group at this time! It’s time to spill the secrets. Traffy sniffed and smelt that gokit (The motogp) killed someone before it came. Traffy grabbed a potato chip threw it and said, “Here you go. If you want 5 packets of these, tell me everything”! Gotki whimpered softly “Fine, we were trying to get humans to give to out boss giudfs, the lord of hell. So please dont kill me and let me leave with those 5 packets now.” Traffy did not let him go because he never promised to let him go, it was just the 5 packets. Instead, he put a chip in Gokit which makes him forget that he got trapped by Traffy and he can spy from Gotki’s perspective.
Ssssss…. BOOM!!! Fn left a trail of ashes so they wont lose the way to the Elec-relic power out station while rt went and studied the machine that powered the city. Traffy investigated at the cams. Rt proudly exclaimed, “I have finished powering up and in a few minutes the relics are ready to power on”! But, the trail of ashes disapeared! The wind might have gusted it away or the motogps let us charge the relics but licked the trail so we cant go back.
Meanwhile, Traffy was at the base filling in documents for PTS (Pinecone Tree Spies). Traffy, rt, and fn have been members of the PTS for a very long time. The owner of PTS actually won the last few battles at e – Mecha stadium! The owner of PTS is Bsdf. Bsdf also helped the group and now he’s back.
Traffy got his t_gun and shot it on a wall. It made a portal and he went to save rt and fn! Whan Traffy arrived, he whispered, “Hey, psst. Come over here were leaving now to defeat giudfs (The boss of all motogps)”! Traffy shot the t_gun at the wall and rt with fn on his back jumped in. They arrived at Kyduos palace a building, hidden in the Earth’s core covered in a special layer that protected the motogps and visitors (Rarely come – never goes back home alive) from burning into a crisp! They hid in a fgh tree ( They are covered in plastic blossoms but good for spying). Bsdf checked the palace entrance where only servants of giudfs come and go, but when he looked closely he saw a foot hiding in a carriage! Rt wondered if it was an innocent wanting to go back home or a decoy trying to trick people so they will get executed. No one knew. Traffy puffed, “C’mon we should sneak into his lair and stop him!” as he climbed down the pink fgh tree. Fn denied but rt still dragged fn down the dree till’ near the bottom he said, “Fine!”
They all snuck up a bamboo right next to a wall of the palace and jumped onto the roof. Traffy shot his t_gun on a part of the roof and there it was, giudfs’s crew all put in tanks? We jumped in but none of them seemed to react or hear it! Then we saw it, the biggest tank, written on it wrote, “giudfs”. No one knew why he put himself in a tank anyway? We knew it was time, we opened up his tank and Traffy shouted, “Hands up giudfs, playtimes over. You are under arrest by the PTS!” In reality, it was a woman confused who muttered, “Where am I?” Now was the huge mystery. Bsdf sniffed her and said it doesn’t smell like giudfs. She asked “I have no idea what you are talking about, first of all, where am I and who is this giudfs person your saying?” “Wait”, Traffy exclaimed, “People kidnapped random strangers, put them in tubes so they become giudfs and the rest. So, giudfs is not real…” What? This confused everyone and the girl help them get everyone from the other tanks out. Rt confusingly asked, “So who made this up then and created giudfs?” Fn sniffed and shouted, “Something’s not right. I can detect a person below us!
“Aha! I knew you would finally find out! You might not know me but I am biudgs. I know that sounds very simmiliar to giudfs because I created it. Now, you might shout and stop me, but, first wait. You are also not real. My friend Mahhy which sounds like Traffy, made you guys!” So, this is all a fictional story. You guys will always exsist though, maybe. Because I will not take you guys from your bottles. Exactly, your in bottles. But, I will make many more characters who will try to stop you on your journey, so you better watch out!”
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1-Y4_Schol-Iko Liu
I accidently did some grammatical errors here is updated for errors:
“Someones” → should be “someone’s”
“creeped” → should be “crept”
“dont” → should be “don’t”
“disapeared” → should be “disappeared”
“whan” → should be “when”
“your saying” → should be “you’re saying”
“simmiliar” → should be “similar”
“exsist” → should be “exist”
“your in bottles” → should be “you’re in bottles”
“help them” → should be “helped them”