Day 2 Writing Homework
Prompt :
Write a page describing your favourite place in the world ( this can be a real place or made up one). Use figurative language and different types of imagery. 500 words
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- Due Date : April 24, 2025
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The Hamburger Shop
As I stepped into the bright light, a bell rang somewhere in the deep dark depths of the chamber. Suddenly, a smell of crispy patties flooded my sneses as I took a seat in the corner. There was absolutely no doubt that this was now my favourite place. A waiter came striding towards me carrying a note book. I ordered the most expensive one without even remembering how a literal butterfly flew out my wallet yesterday. Just as my stomach grumbled and rumble the fith time, a magnificent burger appeared in front of me. My trembling hands crawled towards it slowly. I pickeed it up examining the texture and ingredients, forgetting I was even hungery. Then I took a tiny chomp. Oops, just bread. Then i took a bigger chomp and the flavour hit me like a hammer between the eyes. The taste exploded in my mouth as the flavour of juicy chargrilled patties and capsian cheese that felt like smooth silk. And then I go in for another bite, this time chrunchy lettuce and crispy tomatoes hyptonize my brain, stopping my senses for ten seconds, before I caught up. My ruethlessness and greed finally caught up as the once giant burger was gone, twisting and turning in my stomach. You can probably guess what happens next.
This time a smaller, but taller burger arrives. I don’t hesitate this time. I immersed myself in the rich and tastey savour. Crispy chicken and spicy sauce burns my insides, but I enjoyed it, even though I would be crying when I finish this masterpiece. However, I had learnt my lesson of greed and decide to take small bites and let my self indulge in the taste. I cannot even describe the bliss that I have after eating both of them. These appetizing burgers have made me a epicurean. When I arrived home, I had drove 2 hours, and now my stomach was screaming at my mind again. It was saying, “Go back, eat, go back, eat, go back, e…”. I tried to resist, but the voices were getting stronger and stronger and it was hard to stop them. Then it shouted “EEEAAATT!!!”. The ceiling quavered and the ground shook. I was getting dragged by a person to the car, I was slammed in and I started driving…
The bell rang again when I stepped in. I sat in a table at the opposite corner next to this beefy man. I ordered a chicken pizza with grilled mushrooms. It came right away, letting me to escape the horror of this appetite. Sauce and cheese were hanging dangerously close to the edge. So I took a slice that had sauce about to drip and stuffed it in my mouth. Mmh, I thought. The flavour was light, or at least I thought. My mouth started burning like someone put a match in my mouth, I ran to the toilet and started washing my mouth with water. I nearly crashed in to an old lady on the way. The water helped, but it had a wierd scent. When I got back the, the beefy man laughed and said “I’ll show you how it’s done” and took a slice. As soon as it enetered his mouth, he laughed. But after a few seconds, his face had turned red and he ran to the toilets, just like me, but he didn’t come out for hours. When he got out, he said “Fine, you win” and ran away, on to the bustling road. There was no wonder these memories will make this my favourite place.
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Ran – DAY 2
My favourite place
The sun floated above the pixelated horizon like a glowing yolk in the sky with blocky clouds, the light shone over our world that was built block by block. The land stretched through biomes that were stitched together by rivers that glittered like veins of silver. Each step across the grass released a soft crunch, as though I were walking on dried leaves in autumn. The scent was faintly earthy, like fresh soil after rain.
Towering spruce trees reached toward the sky like green giants, their leaves rustling in the breeze. In the distance, a jagged mountain pierced the sky, capped with snow that gleamed under the square sun’s gaze. Shadows draped over its edges, creating the illusion of movement as if the land itself breathed slowly.
A forest fire burned quietly on a nearby hill, its orange tongues licking hungrily at the wood, pixelated sparks rising like fireflies caught in a dream. The fire didn’t stop until all the trees started to vanish, as ash settled gently like grey confetti. The villagers stared at the forest which was once there but now gone.
Below my feet, the earth groaned as I dug down into its core. Torchlights dancing and singing as I find the shiny iron, glittering emeralds and the sparkling blue diamonds. Caves opened like yawning mouths, their interiors cloaked in velvet darkness. Somewhere in the thick void, a skeleton rattled its bones the sound was dry and sharp, like twigs snapping underfoot.
Aboveground, the village slept under a patchwork sky of darkness and twinkling stars. Lanterns blinded those around as they hund outside homes made of cobble and oak, their warm glow scary away the zombies that wanted to have their meals. Villagers murmured with their out of shape mouths, noses twitching like itchy dogs and their dreams taking over.
This world has infinite creativity, no rules and most importantly no limit. You can scatter the vast landscape, explore the caves of doom, fight the monsters that make your friends scream or build whatever your desires.
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winnie – DAY 2
Aperiludus
A row of iPads lines up around the edges of the arcade. Thousands of arcade games crowd around the area. Waiters walk around serving food and everything is unlimited. Aperiludus is certainly heaven for anyone; my favourite arcade games are here because every arcade game or device game is here. For the iPad, you can log in to your account and play online games like Roblox! The place is huge because they bought a whole entire mall and instead of renting the stores out, they made the whole place an arcade. Hence, it is now a super big and ginormous arcade! It is located where Pencile Mall used to be at 123 street, Sydney, NSW Australia.
The place is amazing. The entry fee is only $300 per person and everything is unlimited. I could not play my favourite arcade game before, just because they did not have it in Australia; now I can. There are many Pac-Man games like One Piece Pac-Man, Pac-Man Nightmare and many more. Moreover, they also have old arcade games so parents can enjoy themselves too with their childhood games: Donkey Kong, Game Boy and countless others.
There is a groundbreaking fine if you litter in Aperiludus for $20,000. Therefore, the floors in the arcade are mostly clean. The gaming area can be relaxing as there are plants around you that give you fresh air. The floors, walls and ceilings are of rolling cobalt blue and emerald green. The aroma of glorious food rushing up your nose that making you eager for a taste of the food.
The place can be a racket from all the gaming noise so they give people a type of headphone that cancels all the noise! For food, you just need to tell the waiters what you want and it can be anything as long as it is not shark fin or other illegal foods. The food served here are all high quality and are prepared by professionals only. The waiters are friendly and can even explain how to play the games to you.
There are countless waiters across the thirteen floors excluding the basement. The top floor has an amazing view of the Sydney Harbour Bridge and the Sydney Opera House. This floor is as big as the other floors but is a restaurant where waiters serves guests’ food. You can always enter this floor to have breakfast, lunch or dinner because this place is open from 8AM-11PM.
Parking is completely free and you never need to worry about the parking lot being full because they just installed five floors of parking, with hundreds of parking spaces on each level. The basement is not brown and dirty. The floor is as white as snow, glimmering from how clean it is, gutters are unseeable because they are hidden between the floors. The basement is cleaned every day and there is a ventilation so you will not smell the gas from the cars.
This place is absolute heaven, it is dangerously addictive and amazing. If you miss an old arcade game or want to see a newly released arcade game, Aperiludus has them available immediately. The place will never be crowded with people bumping everywhere because the place is incredibly spacious.
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Ying Hao Au – DAY 2
My Favourite Place in the World
Up above the clouds, where the wind dances and the sky stretches like a giant blue blanket, there is a place only I know about. It’s a magical treehouse, hidden in the air, built on a strong old tree that reaches all the way from my backyard into the sky. This is my favourite place in the whole world.
The treehouse is made of smooth golden wood that shines in the sunlight like treasure. Its roof is covered in soft moss, and its windows are shaped like stars. When I climb the twisty rope ladder, my heart beats like a drum in a parade. I feel excited and brave every single time.
Inside, the treehouse smells like warm vanilla and fresh leaves. There’s a big soft chair that feels like a hug when I sit in it. I can read books with pages that turn by themselves when the wind whispers past. My dog comes with me too. She curls up on a fluffy cloud-shaped rug and snores like a tiny motor.
From the highest window, I can see everything below. The rivers sparkle like silver snakes, the trees look like broccoli, and the cars are small as bugs. Sometimes, I imagine I’m a sky captain, watching over the land with my dog as my helper.
When clouds float by, they come close enough to touch. One looked like a unicorn eating ice cream. Another looked like a castle with flags. The clouds don’t talk, but I think they’re saying hello in their own cloudy way.
One afternoon, it began to rain. The raindrops tapped on the roof like a soft drumbeat, and the treehouse glowed a little golden light. I made hot chocolate, wrapped myself in a blanket, and listened to the sound. It felt like the treehouse was telling me a bedtime story made of wind and rain.
Even though the treehouse is only in my imagination, it feels real to me. When I’m sad, I think of it and feel calm again. It’s my peaceful place, my dreaming place, my happiest place. I know it will always be there, waiting in the sky.
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Eva – DAY 2
Soft, silky and smooth sheets. A cosy, warm and lilac purple blanket, as fluffy as a sheep’s wool. All in my room! On my door are flowers made from tiny wooden blocks that I painted, above them is the letter E coloured blue. Paintings and pictures, all designed by me hung on the walls. There is not a single bare wall. My desk, that my dad made out of varnished wood from Bunnings, is filled with all my stationery, plushies, two desk lamps and of course my stack of workbooks. Next to my pillow is a skyscraper of library books, home books, books from the random shelf in the living room and school books. That’s what makes my bed so unique. I’ve got a cat themed bed side table, holding all my stuff, on the other side I have another table. In the drawers are baby pictures of myself and pictures of my parents. Next to it is a shelf of all my favourite Popmarts. I have the Skullpanda and Cry baby series all on one shelf. On the very top is a vase of LEGO cherry blossoms my auntie gave me. My closet is always overflowing with clothes, from online shops my mum buys from, Christmas clothes or just random clothes from any shop. I have blankets and extra pillows piled on the top shelf that could cause an earthquake if they ever fell! The great thing about my room is that everything in it belongs to me!
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Cybill – DAY 2
My favourite place in the world would surely be Japan, a country that I have never been to before which is not only why I am interested in Japan. In the following paragraphs I will tell you why I my favourite place would be Japan other than that I have never been to Japan before.
First of all, there are definitely lots of good food from Japan. Take sushi for example. Who does not like sushi? They’re are other good foods from Japan such as ramen, Japanese tofu which is round, not shaped like a rectangular tofu, Japanese curry (Katsu curry), soba (wheat noodles ) and so much more good food that Japan makes.This is one important reason why I am interested in Japan.
My second reason is that there is a new Nintendo is opening this year. There will be all sorts of fun there and there will be fun. You can enter in and out of pipes, sit on rides, take photos, eat food, meet Mario and Luigi, get some stuff related to Nintendo, and so much more things that is fun. This is definitely why that there is no better place on Earth than Japan.
Last, but not least, there are so many fun facts on Japan. For example, it is the eleventh most populated place on Earth- more than Australia, who is forty – four more ranks after Japan – fifty – fifth! The traditional Christmas meal in Japan is KFC. There is a Rabbit Island. The numbers four and nine are unlucky, while three and five are lucky. There are three capital cities. Japan is made out of around fourteen thousand separate islands. Most cities have free WiFi that is public. The most popular sport is baseball. There are one hundred and ten active islands. The world’s oldest company is in Japan.There are so many more facts, but I cannot tell you all because Japan is so interesting.
In conclusion, Japan is surely the best place on earth. There is no way anywhere on Earth is better.
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Jeremy Sun – DAY 2