Day 3 Writing Homework
Prompt :
Write a 400-word email to the mayor Clover Moore or to your local council rep, convincing them to support a river clean-up day in your community. The river should be in Sydney. It could also be a beach. Requirements Use at least 5 vocabulary words from our list Include facts about river pollution Use at least two persuasive techniques Follow the 5-paragraph structure Include a specific call to action
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- Due Date : October 10, 2025
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Clover.Moore@gmail.com
Dear Esteemed Mayor Moore,
Did you know our rivers and lakes are getting polluted at 343,000,000 kilograms per year? I am writing to you to implement river cleanups in Sydney starting from October 8 2025. Water pollution is killing our sea life, making drinking water less safe in our community and is making the water too dirty to swim in. Do you really think not doing anything about pollution is helping to makeover community a better place? The stewardship humans have on our bodies of water is worsening each year.
Firstly, we must implement water cleaning everyday from now on so that it doesn’t kill our sea life in the lakes and rivers of Sydney. Statistics show that while more people are happy with the things that they buy the oceans are not. Whenever people buy something they throw the rubbish away and the wind pulls it into our local rivers. This is hazardous to our ecosystem and must be stopped. Polluting the river like this makes or drinking water risky and dangerous to drink.
My second point as to why we should implement local river cleanups in Sydney is because it makes the drinking water more dangerous to drink. Imagine pouring water into your mouth knowing that there could be oil or plastic in it. Pollution in our drinking water puts our life at risk. For example lots of Sydney lives have been lost because they drink polluted water, the water is mainly polluted by chemicals which not only makes water usage to drink but chemicals going on your skin can also be deadly. Water pollution makes it unsafe to drink and swim in.
Do you think swimming in polluted water is anymore safe than swimming in lava? I thought not. This addresses my third and final point for why we should implement weekly water body cleaning. Swimming in polluted waters which are polluted mainly by chemicals is unsafe for the human bodies. This water can go into your mouth while swimming and can seep through your skin over time. This is toxic for the body and can cause death. These pollutants and chemicals can be stoped if big companies or scientists did their work in a restricted location. These chemicals also contribute to climate change making biodiversity of our rivers and lakes decrease over the past years.
In conclusion water pollution has been getting out of hand and we need to stop it. Many lives have been lost to waterr pollution and we implement weekly water cleaning in our day to day lives we can save thousands of lives. Doing this will keep Sydney one of the safest places in the world. I hope you act fast and this carefully. Make the right choice and you can save thousands of lives.Sydney’s fate is in your hands.
Clover.Moore@gmail.com
Dear Esteemed Mayor Moore,
Did you know our rivers and lakes are getting polluted at 343,000,000 kilograms per year? I am writing to you to implement river cleanups in Sydney starting from October 8 2025. Water pollution is killing our sea life, making drinking water less safe in our community and is making the water too dirty to swim in. Do you really think not doing anything about pollution is helping to make the community a better place? The stewardship humans have on our bodies of water is worsening each year.
Firstly, we must implement water cleaning everyday from now on so that it doesn’t kill our sea life in the lakes and rivers of Sydney. Statistics show that while more people are happy with the things that they buy the oceans are not. Whenever people buy something they throw the rubbish away and the wind pulls it into our local rivers. This is hazardous to our ecosystem and must be stopped. Polluting the river like this makes our drinking water risky and dangerous to drink.
My second point as to why we should implement local river cleanups in Sydney is because it makes the drinking water more dangerous to drink. Imagine pouring water into your mouth knowing that there could be oil or plastic in it. Pollution in our drinking water puts our life at risk. For example lots of Sydney lives have been lost because they drink polluted water, the water is mainly polluted by chemicals which not only makes water usage to drink but chemicals going on your skin can also be deadly. Water pollution makes it unsafe to drink and swim in.
Do you think swimming in polluted water is any safer than swimming in lava? I thought not. This addresses my third and final point for why we should implement weekly water body cleaning. Swimming in polluted waters which are polluted mainly by chemicals is unsafe for the human bodies. This water can go into your mouth while swimming and can seep through your skin over time. This is toxic for the body and can cause death. These pollutants and chemicals can be stopped if big companies or scientists did their work in a restricted location. These chemicals also contribute to climate change making biodiversity of our rivers and lakes decrease over the past years.
In conclusion, water pollution has been getting out of hand and we need to stop it. Many lives have been lost to water pollution and we implement weekly water cleaning in our day to day lives. We can save thousands of lives. Doing this will keep Sydney one of the safest places in the world. I hope you act fast and read this carefully. Make the right choice and you can save thousands of lives. Sydney’s fate is in your hands.
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Y5RWD3-Abdullah
Subject: Urgent Request: Support Cooks River Community Clean-Up Day!
Dear Mayor Clover Moore,
My name is Felix, and I am a Year 5 student at idk school (:. I’m writing to you today because I live near the Cooks River, and I think it’s one of the most important parts of our community. Our beautiful river is getting sick from rubbish, and we need your help to make it healthier. We’re going to have a big community clean-up day and your support is crucial for us to succeed.
The pollution of the river is quite alarming. When I walk along the banks, I see so much plastic debris and garbage on the river. Not only is this ugly; it is highly dangerous for the residents. (Here’s a fact for you): Did you know that plastic debris can take hundreds of years to decompose? When the small birds or eels try to eat this plastic, they get very sick. We would like the river to become clean so our local wildlife can start to thrive again. This is an urgent matter that needs our attention right away.
Our community clean-up day, which we are calling “River Revival Day,” will be held on Saturday, October 26th. We already have 50 volunteers ready to help, but we need the Council’s support to allow us to make it effective and safe. We would like to target plastic bottles, plastic bags, and other rubbish from the banks from Tempe to Earlwood. Not only will it get rid of the rubbish, but it will also show the whole community how important it is to keep our waterways clean.
An investment by your Council in this project would be a powerful statement. By assisting us, you are not just cleaning a river; you are investing in the health and happiness of every resident. Consider the good news stories and the pride boost in the community! People love to see a clean, well-looked-after local environment. Having the resources and stamp of approval of the Council will make our venture safer and so much bigger than what we could undertake alone.
We humbly and urgently request your approval of “River Revival Day” and ask that you provide us with equipment such as heavy-duty gloves, trash bags, and safe disposal bins. Please reply to this email to confirm your support and let us know who we can meet with next week to discuss and finalize the logistics.
Thanks for considering this basic petition. Let’s make the Cooks River beautiful again!
Yours sincerely,
Felix A Concerned Local Resident
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Y5RWD3-zhuyingdorahotmail-com
Dear Respected Mayor Clover Moore,
Bondi Beach, once a thriving beach attracting billions of tourists per year, is now one of the most polluted waterways in the city — but with community action, it doesn’t have to stay that way. Remember the tar-ball incident that started in October last year ended back in January this year? The sphere-shaped debris was first found at Coogee and Bondi beaches in October and was later determined to be a mixture of human waste – cooking oil, not poop! We Australians cleaned almost the whole place up. Well, the beaches – almost every single one of them, reopened. Let me explain why we must support a clean-up day at Bondi Beach.
To initiate, although Bondi appears pristine on the surface, it is harshly harmed by waste. Studies show that up to 80% of ocean litter actually originates from land-based sources, including rivers like the well known Parramatta River. This waterway usually carries plastic waste, microplastics, and dangerous chemical runoff into our oceans such as cooking oil, where it harms marine life and disrupts delicate ecosystems. In 2020 only, Clean Up Australia reported that plastics made up over 60% of all rubbish found in Australian waterways and beaches, which is a significant disaster we should learn from. If we don’t act to help end this problem, this horrifying, disastrous pollution will continue to wash up on our shores and will damage our marine life without us knowing. That would be certainly horrible, won’t it?
To add on, the beaches is the most known in the whole of Australia, with thousands of visitors and tourists per day. Imagine everyone littering around one hundred grams each! And people that come back after one visit! Imagine what the beach will be like after everyone leaves during sunset. Imagine what the beach looks like after being polluted or not being polluted at all! Animals such as seagulls tend to mistaken these plastics for food such as chips, and of course they end up with plastics and microplastics in their stomach, which is dangerous for these animals and even possibly fatal! To save these animals, a clean up is vital, so we MUST have a clean – up day, not annually, but once a week is beneficial, or animals will swallow every piece of rubbish before we even arrive to clean up if the clean – up happens annually.
Last, but not least, without cleaning up, the beach can be hazardous for people too! You probably won’t believe me, but yes, it can even be dangerous for us! Broken glass and sharp objects that are littered can hurt our feet if we step on them. Now, if we throw all rubbish in the ocean, fish will eat them. When they are caught, we eat the fish, not knowing plastics and microplastics are in the body and that we are eating plastics and microplastics! This is why we MUST have clean – ups, just to secure our safety and benefit us and the environment we live in.
In conclusion, we must have clean ups, respected Clover Moore. We must have them to benefit the environment and to ensure and justify the safety of us and everyone around us.
Kind regards,
Jeremy
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Y5RWD3-Jeremy Sun
More than 400 words
Dear Clover Moore,
As we all know about the importance of the Hawkesbury River, we need to protect it. The Hawkesbury holds deep spiritual and cultural significance for the indigenous people, it displays the historical power, and it is a leading contributor to tourism industries because of all these reasons and its natural beauty. Don’t you agree with me that we must protect this river?
The Hawkesbury already is facing many problems such as climate change, mass pollution and dangerous algal blooms. Algal blooms are something that disturbs the ecosystem and water. They are typically a greenish colour which affects the natural pristine water. It releases poisonous toxins into the water which kills a lot of fish species and marine life.
Additionally, many people litter items into the river thinking that there will be no effect. However, an innocent species will get harmed some day. Wherever you litter, the pieces fly away somewhere, and potentially land in rivers like the Hawkesbury. And, when people do visit, they still place rubbish in the water.
But what can we do to make sure that these problems don’t have further unwanted effects? A simple solution would be to host a river clean-up day every month. On this day, locals and people in the Hornsby Shire will come to the river and collect all trash that has been found in stewardship, and participate in community events that will raise awareness about this for them to act on it themselves. I believe that this clean up day can make a big impact on securing a beautiful thriving river with flourishing biodiversity.
If we do maintain a clean river, more tourists would many to visit the Hawkesbury River. When tourists arrive, flight tickets, bus fares and other expenses go towards small start-ups or national companies and that will boost the economy rate, and GDP rates will sky rocket. Some tourists maybe persuaded to live in this country which leads to more money in hand to boost the economy rate even further. This goes to show that one action could potentially lead to making Australia (currently 13th) the best ‘economical’ countries in the world.
In summary, we must hold a river clean-up day, desirably every month in order to keep the Hawkesbury River pristine and clean for the ecosystem to thrive. Whether you are taking environmental factors or economical traits, it all comes to a point that we must hold a a clean up day for the Hawkesbury River.
Yours Sincerely,
Khushi Siromani – Local School Kid, Waitara Public School
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Y5RWD3-Khushi
Dear Mayor Clover Moore,
Did you know that one point seven billion people globally are drinking water that is contaminated, posing a significant risk to public health? Shelly Beach-a beach once thriving with nature and beauty from its soft, sparkling sand, to the rhythmic sounds of waves lapping and crashing to finally its vast expanse of the blue sea underneath the glowing sky, has turned into a disaster. This beach is contaminated with sewage overflows.
Shelly Beach is susceptible to faecal pollution and is not always safe for swimming. Scientists have made shocking discoveries of high levels of microplastics in the sand, some samples recording over four thousand bits of microplastics in just one square metre! The state of Shelly Beach requires urgent and immediate action.
With poor water quality, there are unsafe levels of bacteria and are at the cusp of getting diseases such as respiratory infections and skin rashes. According to the Australian Microplastic Assessment Project has been consistently ranking it as Australia’s worst hotspot.
Every storm washes new pollutants, including high concentrations of faecal bacteria, into Shelly Beach. If the source issues like stormwater runoff releasing waste from sewages are not thought about, the poor water quality days will increase, forcing more frequent public closures of a popular swim spot in Sydney that attracts many tourists.
Our local community is highly engaged and enthusiastic about proposing a beach cleanup event to protect our marine environment. We are committed to cleaning up not merely visible litter such as bottle caps and single use plastics but also finding more data on microplastics found to help reduce waterway pollution.
The severity of this problem is unimaginable. From the thousands of microplastics dumped on our beaches in a square metre, poisoning marine life and threatening swimmers, kids and adults demand immediate community action. Will we sit calmly and watch as the centerpiece of our ecosystem is being damaged? We wait for your approval, respected Mayor Clover More- to stop the contamination from becoming worse than it already is.
Yours Sincerely,
Chloe
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Y5RWD3-Jinjin Weng
Dear Mayor, Clover Moore
I am writing to you because a large amount of pollution is urging near the edge. I am asking you make a River Clean-Up Day for all of Sydney. As a resident in Sydney, I am concerned about the pollution population growing into our humble waterways. The impact on our environment, wildlife and overall community wellbeing is all at stake. It’s time to step in and take real action to protect our city!
All the rivers have suffered pollution caused by plastic-waste and much other rubbish. The city generates more than 5,500 tonnes of rubbish each day. Studies shows if just 10% of Sydney’s population took part in a river clean-up day and each person collected 1–2 kg of rubbish, we could remove between 530 and 1,060 tonnes of rubbish from Sydney’s rivers and waterways in just one day. Now let’s all work together to clean all rivers and beaches!
A dedicated clean-up day would not only reduce pollution but also raise awareness for all. By involving schools, local businesses, and environmental groups, we can collaborate on a practical solution. An event like this would impact all of Sydney and maybe inspired other city as well! One small act can change the world!
Picture this, families enjoying a cleaner riverbank, children learning the value of protecting nature, and local wildlife returning to a healthier habitat. Isn’t that the kind of Sydney we all want to see? Let’s create positive change and show that small, local actions can have powerful, long-lasting effects. Altogether, we can change and make an impact on the world!
To conclude, I request you think about this issue and consider sponsoring and promoting River Clean-Up Day. With your support, we can provide resources, coordinate volunteers, and ensure the event reaches as many community members as possible. Please consider taking a leadership role in this vital initiative.
Sincerely, Farzana
Day 3 Clean Up River Day
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Y5RWD3-Maruf
Dear Mayor Clover Moore,
I am writing to you as a concerned resident of our large community to advocate for the organization of a “Clean Up River Australia Day” in our local area. Our local river is a vital part of our environment, providing habitat for wildlife, recreational opportunities for families, and contributing to the overall beauty of our city and land. However, it is currently suffering from pollution caused by littering and illegal waste dumping, which threatens both the ecosystem and our community’s health by drinking this poisonous water. By supporting a dedicated cleanup day to help our city, we can restore the river’s natural beauty and promote environmental responsibility among residents.
First of all, imagine children playing along the riverbank, their laughter echoing as they enjoy a clean, safe environment. Now, picture the same area scattered with plastic bottles, bags, and other disgusting and smelly waste, discouraging outdoor activities and harming wildlife and the environment. A community-led cleanup would not only improve the physical state of the river but also foster pride and a sense of ownership among residents. When people see tangible results from their efforts, it encourages ongoing environmental stewardship, creating a ripple effect of positive change throughout our community.
Subsequently, many cities around the world have successfully organized similar events, demonstrating that community involvement can lead to significant environmental improvements. For example, America’s annual River Clean-Up Day has mobilized thousands of volunteers, resulting in the removal of tons of waste and increased awareness about pollution. These initiatives have proven that collective action can make a meaningful difference. By supporting a similar event here, our city can join these successful examples and set a precedent for environmental responsibility in Australia.
In conclusion, supporting a “Clean Up River Australia Day” aligns with our community’s values of sustainability and environmental care. It offers an opportunity to unite residents, protect local wildlife, and enhance the natural beauty of our city. I urge you to consider endorsing this initiative, which can lead to a cleaner, healthier river for generations to come. Together, we can make a positive impact and demonstrate our commitment to environmental stewardship. Thank you for your time and consideration.
Sincerely,
Eli C
Dear Mayor Clover Moore,
I am writing to you because we should make a clean-up crew for the Georges River. I live around Georges River and the river is extremely polluted. I am from Oatley West Public School and being in that school, we have a lot of pollution problems. Our school is right next to the Georges River and a lot of rubbish from out school gets drained into the river. This means lots of dead fish, murky, dark waters and plastic at every sight. Nobody in the community would want to see dead, dried up fish on the Oatley Beach or disgusting greenish-brown water. Our town needs to be cleaned up immediately.
To begin with, there will be a lot of dried dead fish. If we don’t make a clean-up crew, Oatley Beach will be smelly and disgusting. Nobody wants to go to a beach like that. There are a lot of dead fish because those fish have eaten the plastic that has fallen through the drain. So if we didn’t have any rubbish down the drain, they probably wouldn’t have eaten it. But when dead sand covered fish is left out in the burning hot sun, it stinks and smells so badly that flies would probably infest the place.
Furthermore, the water would be completely brown after lots of rubbish. Have you seen how much a bit of plastic can damage a lifecycle of a river? When plastic breaks down it mostly mixes together and turns the water into a dark brown or a dirty green colour. This is disgusting and photographers who usually take pictures of the water, definitely wouldn’t want to see brown water in there sunset pictures.
Last but not least, there will be plastic covering up the entirety of Oatley Beach and Georges River. Because the tides are increasing, that means more rubbish will be washed up against the local beach. Tourists wouldn’t want to be swimming in plastic for their holidays. The plastic pollution is an exceptionally urgent problem that must be cleaned up or it will be washed up towards the Pacific or Indian Ocean!
It is undoubtedly, unquestionably certain that we should have clean-up crews because, there will be dead and dried up fish on the shore, the water would be particularly dirty and there will be plastic everywhere. So let’s tell the government to get a clean-up crew for the local areas! Let’s make the rivers cleaner to swim and make the beaches spotless so everyone can have fun there! Nobody wants smelly and dirty beaches so let’s make a difference in the oceans!
Kind regards,
Olivia
Dear Mayor Clover Moore,
I am writing to you because we should make a clean-up crew for the Georges River. I live around Georges River and the river is extremely polluted. I am from Oatley West Public School and being in that school, we have a lot of pollution problems. Our school is right next to the Georges River and a lot of rubbish from out school gets drained into the river. This means lots of dead fish, murky, dark waters and plastic at every sight. Nobody in the community would want to see dead, dried up fish on the Oatley Beach or disgusting greenish-brown water. Our town needs to be cleaned up immediately.
To begin with, there will be a lot of dried dead fish. If we don’t make a clean-up crew, Oatley Beach will be smelly and disgusting. Nobody wants to go to a beach like that. There are a lot of dead fish because those fish have eaten the plastic that has fallen through the drain. So if we didn’t have any rubbish down the drain, they probably wouldn’t have eaten it. But when dead sand covered fish is left out in the burning hot sun, it stinks and smells so badly that flies would probably infest the place.
Furthermore, the water would be completely brown after lots of rubbish. Have you seen how much a bit of plastic can damage a lifecycle of a river? When plastic breaks down it mostly mixes together and turns the water into a dark brown or a dirty green colour. This is disgusting and photographers who usually take pictures of the water, definitely wouldn’t want to see brown water in there sunset pictures.
Last but not least, there will be plastic covering up the entirety of Oatley Beach and Georges River. Because the tides are increasing, that means more rubbish will be washed up against the local beach. Tourists wouldn’t want to be swimming in plastic for their holidays. The plastic pollution is an exceptionally urgent problem that must be cleaned up or it will be washed up towards the Pacific or Indian Ocean!
It is undoubtedly, unquestionably certain that we should have clean-up crews because, there will be dead and dried up fish on the shore, the water would be particularly dirty and there will be plastic everywhere. So let’s tell the government to get a clean-up crew for the local areas! Let’s make the rivers cleaner to swim and make the beaches spotless so everyone can have fun there! Nobody wants smelly and dirty beaches so let’s make a difference in the oceans!
Kind regards,
Olivia
Dear Mayor Clover Moore,
I am writing to you because we should make a clean-up crew for the Georges River. I live around Georges River and the river is extremely polluted. I am from Oatley West Public School and being in that school, we have a lot of pollution problems. Our school is right next to the Georges River and a lot of rubbish from out school gets drained into the river. This means lots of dead fish, murky, dark waters and plastic at every sight. Nobody in the community would want to see dead, dried up fish on the Oatley Beach or disgusting greenish-brown water. Our town needs to be cleaned up immediately.
To begin with, there will be a lot of dried dead fish. If we don’t make a clean-up crew, Oatley Beach will be smelly and disgusting. Nobody wants to go to a beach like that. There are a lot of dead fish because those fish have eaten the plastic that has fallen through the drain. So if we didn’t have any rubbish down the drain, they probably wouldn’t have eaten it. But when dead sand covered fish is left out in the burning hot sun, it stinks and smells so badly that flies would probably infest the place.
Furthermore, the water would be completely brown after lots of rubbish. Have you seen how much a bit of plastic can damage a lifecycle of a river? When plastic breaks down it mostly mixes together and turns the water into a dark brown or a dirty green colour. This is disgusting and photographers who usually take pictures of the water, definitely wouldn’t want to see brown water in there sunset pictures.
Last but not least, there will be plastic covering up the entirety of Oatley Beach and Georges River. Because the tides are increasing, that means more rubbish will be washed up against the local beach. Tourists wouldn’t want to be swimming in plastic for their holidays. The plastic pollution is an exceptionally urgent problem that must be cleaned up or it will be washed up towards the Pacific or Indian Ocean!
It is undoubtedly, unquestionably certain that we should have clean-up crews because, there will be dead and dried up fish on the shore, the water would be particularly dirty and there will be plastic everywhere. So let’s tell the government to get a clean-up crew for the local areas! Let’s make the rivers cleaner to swim and make the beaches spotless so everyone can have fun there! Nobody wants smelly and dirty beaches so let’s make a difference in the oceans!
Kind regards,
Olivia
Clean-Up Crew Argument