Day 2 Writing Homework
Prompt : Revise your persuasive letter from Day 1 to incorporate the advanced techniques learned today:
Review and enhance the precision of your language throughout
Add at least three specific pieces of evidence (statistical, historical, expert opinion)
Include one paragraph that addresses and refutes a counterargument
Apply at least three advanced persuasive techniques from today’s lesson
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- Due Date : April 17, 2025
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10-Day Writing Autumn Holiday Class – Day 1 Homework
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Day 2 – Ritu
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1XXaF3qRTB6eGtSU2VYoErenIzG7hmig5eWZAL8gOl0w/edit?usp=sharing
I added a para Wich is highlighted in pink
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Day 2 – pravinaa
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1mOV0Y-Q6Nl52ZTriye3A6upacaj0G0xNvyvP_hK3BzE/edit?usp=sharing
i think its better than last time ig
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Day 2 – Ammar
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1C5ETdsppca974qJBsW4h4WeBl1DyoGLmjV5co5HfU4s/edit?usp=sharing
The paragraph i added is highlighted in red-in day 1 i accidently used the same document and added the para that i was supposed to add in day 2 in day 1 and day 2, so can u change my day 1 feedback also
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Day 2 – Saathvik
I AM DONE!!!!!!!!!!!!
Holiday Writing Course Year 6 Day 2_ Persuasive Letter Writing About Library Demolition Revision
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Day 2 – Praveen
Date: 14th of April 2025
To: Penrith City Council
601 High Street, Penrith NSW 2750
From: Sender’s Office
218 Belmore Street, Penrith NSW 2750
Unacceptable Demolishment of Community Library
Dear Penrith Councillors,
I am writing as you have ignited a spark of agony perishing my soul. You have plans to destroy Penrith’s historical masterpiece; the library, and replace it with a commercial shopping centre. Is the extinction of written knowledge and fantasy really worth another market saturated with car exhaust fumes? I acknowledge that you wish to develop to fit the economic status as of right now, but disconnecting the sacred connection between the community is unacceptable. I, a student who cherishes the true value of the community library by enjoying the books that lay on the dusty shelves of our beautifully old archive of imagination, will disapprove of any attempt to stab the community’s heart. You are a talented person who understands how to puppeteer, pulling the strings to benefit our district, and doing that with recognised opinions of the people. Please recognise mine and many others, too.
The Community Library of Penrith is bound to our spirits, its architectural brilliance allowing us to embrace the pure delicacy of ancient times. To erase this deeply treasured space is to sever a bond with our neighbourhood’s soul. Professor Keys has scientifically proved that over 30% of individuals whom regularly visit the library have a more intelligent mindset compared to those who don’t. Beyond the now locked metal gates of the library, I reminisce about the blissful collection of wisdom I stood before, the magnificent discoveries I adventured through, and the unbreakable thread of friendship I have between me and the shelves that awaken boundless thought. The library is a guardian of knowledge, bearing no limits to imagination. The mystifying awareness that you are one to attack the kingdom of studies is unbelievable.
What will replace our iconic library? A shopping complex that yet displays goods, but shoplifts our minds. My tear-streaked face pleads you to stop the demolition of the core of my heart. The utter thought of our alluring library being reduced to repulsive debris shatters my foundation. My voice is paired with echoes of melancholy and other library-lovers, and I hope you receive them. It is beneficial for you to stop the plans, now, in order to keep the society’s trust in you. We respect your determination to develop our economy, but is eliminating the wings of preservation shielding knowledge essential to develop the economy?
The plan for a new shopping complex will benefit us economically, and keep us up the ranks on economic status. I can completely comprehend why you would decide to do this. However, the blueprints and ideas are bloodstained with greed and desperation. Destroying one of our suburb’s greatest ancient structures would only symbolise how you proceed to knock down the things we love and replace them with things we don’t need. Picture this: a bubbly child, dancing their way to their beloved library. But as they approach, bulldozers roar, cranes scream and construction builders argue. The rainbow aura fades from the child, their face frowning and smile drooping; a broken soul and a loss of ability to trust. How will they percept you when they find out you did this?
The removal of knowledge, happiness, bonds and imagination will eventually destroy everyone’s spirit. Do you wish for the shattering of hearts and the lack of pure joy on Earth? We should embrace our lifetime through adventures of words, as the unveiling of learning makes routes for our mind, fighting the struggles with yet another shelf of discovery. I beg you to consider my request to end the demolition of knowledge, deliberately. You must know that our library is not just a regular library, it is the place of storage for education and amusement. We can not allow the past to be bulldozed in the name of profit. This is not paper and bricks — this is legacy, this is love, this is learning. I ask you again: will you be the guardian of our future or the demolisher of our past?
Respectfully,
S.C
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Day 2 – serena
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Day 2 – Mohamed
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1GMOw_ZRVqsqR9Hn-rADuXRDMS9pF3fmXy6_2tZftM4c/edit?tab=t.0
Hello Jessie, Please edit the privacy setting of the docs so we can access it. Thanks
Almost reached the writing goal 🙁
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Day 2 – Ruibin
19 Hayman St 17 Glarth St
Sydney Greendale
NSW 2015 NSW 2000
Re: Greendale Library Demolition
Dear Councilor Thompson,
I’m Jay, a student from Greendale public school, writing to you concerning the heart wrenching and detrimental proposal to demolish the Greendale Library and build yet another money hungry soulless shopping center. Imagine the sound of a fleet of bulldozers advancing towards the rubble of our library, its once dignified facades lay in ruin shattered among the hard earth. Each brick and floorboard wrenched from its position is severing an artery along the tapestry of our community. The cacophony of rubble falling, splintering wood and glass shattering would echo through our streets leaving us yearning for lost cultural memory and intellectual potential. This is what our glorious library might become within the following months. As an anguished student who has spent many hours at the library, I find myself urged to voice my opinion. The library’s hallowed halls have been a place for me, and many others, to finish homework and study for exams. How can we justify extinguishing the flame of the library? The mere thought of a world devoid of those sacred shelves and books haunts me. I implore you to stand against this horrendous proposal and reconsider this catastrophic decision before it is irreversible.
The destruction of our library would leave a monumental void in our community. Not just me but many of my fellow peers at the Glarth St public school adore the library. It’s a haven for learning. Destroying the library would ruin the future of the dozens of students who rely on the resources of Greendale Library. Would you want to be remembered as the councilor who condemned dozens of innocent students to an uneducated future. Not everyone can afford study tools, like books and computers. The library might be the only place some students have access to resources. Unfortunately due to shifting economic conditions some may not be able to afford computers or textbooks. This evidently shows that the library is a key community resource. “What will become of our community’s intellectual heart if this demolition moves forward? In its place, we’ll be left with a commercial wasteland — where the pursuit of profit replaces the pursuit of knowledge, and consumption takes the place of contemplation.”
The library is also a place for people to connect with each other. Some students wait with their friends at the library and read or study before their parents pick them up. Additionally students use it to study. They can study for exams in a supportive and friendly area. For some students the library is the place where they can finish assignments and homework. Over 70% ofThey can get in last minute study time before exams. People form study groups where a few friends help each other out before exams. These groups can be crucial for boosting morale in the days counting down to the exam. Our library is like the heart of our community interconnecting us like a map of veins and arteries. A 2018 survey by the Department of Education documented a 22% drop in English amongst primary school student’s from 3 neighbouring schools after their local library was removed.
Our local library serves our community. Under the safety of the library people gather for social groups or activities. Senior citizens can learn how to use modern day technology by trying the free computers at the library. Immigrants can use the free Library’s English courses to start a new life in our beloved town. Tearing down Greendale library is ripping a gaping hole in the fabric of our community. People can gather to learn skills such as knitting or drawing. The library workers also set up activities for younger kids. Take Rhyme Time for example where toddlers have picture books read to them and sing nursery rhymes. The library fosters community spirit and brings people together. We cannot let the library turn into a shopping complex. According to the library records over 70 000 visits to our Greendale Library were recorded last year. Our library physically expands our knowledge, nourishes our spirits, and unites our community.
While the argument that a shopping center would bring valuable tax revenue and provide jobs to the community is valid, it’s a view that deserves serious consideration. However, this argument crumbles under careful scrutiny. Our library already draws $120 000 from parking dollars a year. Additionally, the library 4.7 million dollars of economic benefit through services like education support, social services and small business. Head librarian Daniel Fletcher, a dedicated worker for the last 20 years, states that the library has paid for itself multiple times over the course of a few decades. Are we to sacrifice an institution that nurtures intellectual potential and leads people down the path of success in favor of a shopping center? Our library is the foundation of our community.
Our community entrusts you with the power to change our community, we hope that you will make the right decision and call off the proposal.
With heartfelt cries I hope you will take my letter into consideration.
The library is a beacon of knowledge, its presence boosting our community’s intellectual level. Community must be protected, knowledge must be protected, our library must be protected.
Yours sincerely,
Jay