Day 2 Writing Homework
Prompt:
Imagine you woke up one morning to find that you had turned
into your favorite animal.
Write a narrative (story) about your day as this animal.
Think about:
- What animal are you?
- How do you feel as this animal?
- What adventures or challenges do you face?
- How do you interact with other animals?
- How do you eventually turn back into a human, if at all?
Remember to: - Plan your story before you start.
- Use descriptive words to explain how you feel and what you see.
- Write in complete sentences.
- Pay attention to your spelling, punctuation, and paragraphs.
- Check and edit your writing.
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- Due Date : January 9, 2025
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”Roar! What was that?”I cried as I woke up from a deep sleep, anxiously holding on to my teddy bear, but when I turned on the light, I was not a human. My legs started to shake, and I stared at myself with astonishment; then, I could feel my soft underbelly and sharp claws. I could not believe it. I was a ferocious lion.
As I pounced out of my cosy bed and into the tall grass, I could smell the vibrant flowers near me. When I was about to snack on a long, thin grass, another muscular and savage ran, and I accidentally bumped into him. ”The other lion said, How dare you bump into me? I’m stronger than you and braver than you roared the lion.” You may be more assertive and brave than me, but I’m wiser and faster than you; the other lion went silent and walked, embarrassed.
Finally, I was headed off to explore the other bits of the jungle, but then I saw the other lion return. ”He said, if you were more intelligent and faster, then prove it still undefeated.” First, they ran up a steep mountain; I pushed my limbs to my limits, but I lost I started to feel a little sad, but I knew I had to for the smartness, and I lost. I started to feel embarrassed too.
The other lion started to comfort me, and I felt much better. I got back into my cosy back and drifted off to sleep, and I started to feel my skin, and I was back to normal, and I was so relieved.
FEEDBACK
DAY 2-Y3NAPLAN-R9 – FEEDBACK
I went to bed last night when I woke up. I was a snake. My skin had to turn into scales. My scales were colored black with red stripes. I was in a cave; it was dark and cold. It felt like I was in a freezer I could hear nothing except my heart going crazy. The air in the cave tasted like metallic ice whistling inside the cave. I was so confused and lost. I did not know where I was or how I ended up here.
I tried to call out for help but I realised I could not speak because I was now a snake and had no vocal box. All I could do was make a hissing noise “ssssssss”. I explored my surroundings my eyes scanning the cave in the dark. I felt the vibration through the floor in the cave. Its lead me to an opening. As I left the cave I found myself confronted by an expansive body of water. I realise that I was on an empty island surrounded by a vast ocean.
Then suddenly an eagle swooped down from above towards me. He must have thought I was his next meal” Oh crap”. The sheer thought and fear of being someone else lunch woke me up.I realise to the next morning. It was just a dream.
FEEDBACK
DAY 2-Y3NAPLAN-Ethan – FEEDBACK
I woke one sunny morning to find myself feel pain on my legs as I lay on my squishy, blue cat bed. As I got off the bed, I found out that I could not stand on two feet. I looked in the mirror to see… I HAD TURNED INTO A KITTEN! I could not wait for my adventure to begin!!
My scrumptious breakfast was waiting for me outside the house door. After I ate, I felt like chasing a dog so I crept outside and found myself face to face with a grumpy, old Bulldog. The dog tried to bite me then started to chase me. I was very terrified. When I looked back I saw that the Bulldog had disapeared over the wooden fence that surrounded my house.
I ate my lunch then I chased some beautiful Blackbirds. Then after a while, I ate fish for dinner and fell asleep immidietly. Cold wind stung my face and when I woke up, I was back my normal, pink bed. I was a human again! WOW!
FEEDBACK
DAY 2-Y3NAPLAN-Kiara Shah – FEEDBACK
Shocking Surprise
I started to yawn, but instead, came out a quiet hiss!
“HISS!”
I was surprised when I saw a large type of snakeskin beside me.
“WHOAH! WHAT IS THAT FREAKING THING!” I screamed.
This was the time when I realised that I had transformed into a gigantic, long, slimy snake. Slithering around is as easy as a snake because I wouldn’t have to get tired when I only stepped 12 to 20 footsteps.
I slithered in the bright, sunny sunlight. The scales on my back shined as bright as gold, turning it into protective armour. As I dodged and ducked, trying to avoid people’s large footsteps, I happened to bump into a stray mouse.
“CRASH!”
It was not a long time until the mouse pounced on my back. But for the mouse, the armour was so powerful that it pierced through the mouse’s teeth. It was launched back in the bushes.
Not for long to celebrate, I was caught in a ginormous spider’s web. I squirmed desperate to get out. But it was no use.
“How will I get out of this sticky solution?” I thought carefully.
Suddenly I shot a powerful current of venom that cleared out some of the silk which was enough for me to wiggle out.
When I woke up, it was just an amazing dream! It was like a snake adventure!
jamesy Day 2
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The day I work up as a Lion