Day 5 Writing Homework
Prompt : Write both emails for the playground scenario:
Informal Email to Fellow Students: Gather support for your playground improvement campaign using informal tone
while maintaining a persuasive impact.
Formal Email to Principal: Request playground renovations using formal tone, persuasive evidence, and
emotive/descriptive language.
Requirements:
Include all email components (subject line through sign-off)
Use at least 5 examples of emotive language in each email
Include at least 5 examples of descriptive language in each email
Maintain appropriate register for each audience
Keep Formal email to 500-600 words
Keep Informal email to 500-600 words
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- Due Date : April 20, 2025
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Renovation 2
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Emails
Email1
Subject: Request for immediate actions for what’s called the doomsday playground.
To: PrincipalHenderson.school.24564
Dear Principal Henderson,
A serious problem has been raised, many parents care for their Childs safety
but when they’d see the kids playground, they would astonished, with their mouths open, on how dangerous it is. From the monkey bars, to the slides there is nothing which is entirely safe. Some parents may even file complaints, and I’m not lying the playground needs some serious renovations.
Imagine a playground with improper made swings with monkey bars spiky enough to stab someone, cracked concrete, bad and faded markings for the basketball court with the suns heat feeling as its lacerating your skin this isn’t a fiction novel but the actual state of the school playground.
Once vibrant and spirited, the playground is now a place of avoidance and disgrace. First of all, after having two whole sessions deliberate learning anybody would want a break, and from a recent school survey more than 70% of people visit playgrounds and basket ball courts in lunch and recess, which means, most of those kids will refuse to go to the playground as it is dangerous. With having that, the kids who refuse to play in the playground won’t get any leisure time to ease of all the burden on their shoulders, and if this continues there may be serious consequences.
In order to make the playground more stunning you should first remove all harmful items, enhance equipment, make more shades and finally make it so that it catches ones eye this could be like decorating or planting flowers and trees once these renovations are done the playground would be more captivating than ever.
Finally, Principal Henderson I kindly request for renovations to be made, which will make this a better school.
Yours Sincerely,
Pukhraj
Email2
Subject: Raising support for renovating school play ground
To: Available to all year 6 students and class presidents
We have all seen the condition of our lovely playground with the fields as crisp as potato chips and the loved monkey bars all just disgustingly rusted and the once tightened screws of the swing now loosened with no knowing when the entire thing gets broken up in to pieces, wouldn’t we all like our old playground to be restored?
Just imagine a playground better than the one we all know with an eye catching look more benches, and especially more places for shade in hot sunny days. Remember all those annoying faded markings on the basketball court which conveniently helps the opposing team score an extra goal, well not anymore if we gather support we may be able to convince the principal to renovate the entire playground. Wouldn’t that be great?
Take a look at the play ground, there are so many hazards like spiky metal bars which were railings, shaking platforms and damaged equipment. Some of these dangers can even injure someone.
I strongly request you all to start raising support to convince Principal Henderson to start taking actions renovating dangerous items enhancing school equipment and even start decorating the play ground.
Sincerely,
Raised by Pukhraj