Day 6 Writing Homework
Prompt : Write two persuasive emails about the playground renovation:
A formal email to your local council member requesting inspection and support (300-350 words)
An informal email to a local business owner requesting sponsorship (300-350 words)
Each email must include:
At least two examples of figurative language (metaphor, simile, personification)
Strong emotionally evocative language
Vivid physical descriptions that engage at least three senses
Clear adaptation to the specific audience
Proper email structure
500-600 Words
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- Due Date : April 23, 2025
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DAY 6 Dawood
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DAY 6 Sophie Xia
Subject: Help Bring Joy Back to the Park—Sponsor Our Playground Renovation!
Hey Jenna,
Hope you’re doing awesome! I’m reaching out because we’ve got a big dream brewing—and I think your amazing bakery could be the cherry on top.
Remember that old playground over by Willow Park? The one where kids used to zoom down the slides like mini superheroes and the air buzzed with energy like a summer festival? These days, it’s more of a ghost town. The colors are washed out like a forgotten painting, the equipment creaks like it’s sighing from neglect, and the whole place just feels… sad.
But here’s the thing—we’re not giving up on it. A few of us in the neighborhood are kickstarting a renovation project to bring it back to life. We’re talking fresh paint, new slides, safe mulch, and maybe even a splash of mural magic. Picture this: kids’ laughter ringing out like music, the scent of clean woodchips and fresh grass, sunlight bouncing off bright play structures—pure joy in motion.
That’s where you come in! We’re looking for local sponsors, and SweetRise Bakery is top of our list. Not only do you make the best cupcakes this side of Manhattan (seriously, that lemon lavender one is art), but you’re also one of the biggest-hearted businesses in town.
Your support—whether it’s a donation, baked goods for the fundraiser, or just spreading the word—would mean the world. In return, we’ll shout your name from the rooftops (and also put it on banners, shirts, and social media, of course).
Let’s build a space where kids can feel free, safe, and inspired again. Let’s make the park sing.
Thanks for considering it. Let’s chat soon?
All the best,
Alioth
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Day 6 – Emails about The Playground Renovation
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DAY 6 Yusuf Khan
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Persuasive letter
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DAY 6 Matthew Hwang
Formal Email to Local Council Member
Subject: Urgent Request for Inspection and Support: Playground Renovation at Rushcutters Bay Park Playground
Dear Councillor Sarah Jones,
I am writing to you today as a deeply concerned resident of Darling Point to implore your immediate attention to the severely deteriorated state of the playground at Rushcutters Bay Park Playground, located at New South Head Road, Rushcutters Bay. This once vibrant hub for our community’s children has sadly become a shadow of its former self, a landscape of cracked rubber flooring that feels like walking on brittle bones and rusting equipment that groans under the slightest touch, whispering tales of neglect under the shade of the Moreton Bay Figs.
The sensory experience of visiting the playground is now far from joyful. The once brightly coloured play structures, reminiscent of sails catching the Sydney breeze, are now faded and chipped, their surfaces rough and unwelcoming to little hands. The air, once filled with the happy shrieks of children enjoying the harbour breeze and the distant calls of seagulls, is now often heavy with the metallic scent of decay. The splintered wooden beams of the climbing frame feel treacherous, a constant worry for parents who watch their children navigate this obstacle course of disrepair.
Our children deserve a safe and stimulating environment where their imaginations can take flight against the backdrop of our beautiful harbour. Currently, the playground stands as a stark reminder of unmet needs, a concrete testament to the erosion of community resources within the vibrant Eastern Suburbs. We envision a revitalized space where laughter rings out like the joyful peal of bells across the bay, where new, accessible equipment sparks creativity and encourages physical activity under the warm Sydney sun. This renovation is not merely about aesthetics; it is about investing in the well-being and development of our future generation in the heart of our local government area.
We earnestly request your presence for an on-site inspection to witness firsthand the urgent need for intervention. Furthermore, we would be immensely grateful for your support in allocating council resources towards a comprehensive renovation project. Your advocacy will be instrumental in transforming this neglected space back into the vibrant heart of our community, a jewel in the crown of the Woollahra Municipal Council. We are eager to discuss this matter further and explore potential solutions in partnership with the council.
Thank you for your time and consideration of this critical issue affecting our local families.
Sincerely,
divjot
Informal Email to Local Business Owner
Subject: Let’s Bring the Sparkle Back to Rushcutters Bay Park Playground!
Hey Michael,
Hope you’re doing fantastic down at “The Cruising Yacht Club of Australia”!
I’m reaching out to you today with an exciting opportunity to make a real difference right here in our community. You know the playground at Rushcutters Bay Park, down on New South Head Road? Well, it’s seen better days, and honestly, it’s starting to feel a bit like a forgotten toy box under the shade of those beautiful fig trees. The bright colours have faded, the swings creak like old rocking chairs in the afternoon breeze coming off the water, and the whole place just feels a little…tired.
Imagine the scene: kids running around with beaming smiles, the joyful squeals echoing through the air, the vibrant colours of new equipment catching the sunlight filtering through the harbour-side trees. That’s the vision we have for the playground, but we need a little help from fantastic local businesses like yours to make it a reality. We’re planning a renovation to breathe new life into this space, turning it back into the vibrant heart of our neighbourhood where little imaginations can soar like kites on a windy day over the sparkling water of Rushcutters Bay.
Think about the impact your business, CYCA, could have. By becoming a sponsor, you wouldn’t just be donating; you’d be planting seeds of joy and investing directly in the happiness and well-being of local families who frequent your establishment and enjoy the park. We envision opportunities for prominent signage showcasing your generous support, a tangible symbol of your commitment to our community that everyone enjoying the park and passing by will see. Your contribution would help us create a space where children can make memories with the scent of the nearby salty air and the sound of the rigging in the marina, friendships can blossom under the warm Australian sun, and our community can thrive.
We’d love to chat more about how you can be a part of this exciting project and explore the different sponsorship levels available. It’s a chance to not only give back to our wonderful Rushcutters Bay community but also to shine a positive light on your business within our local area.
Give me a shout when you have a moment – I’d be happy to grab a coffee at “The Grounds of Alexandria” and tell you all about our plans.
Warmly,
divjot
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