Day 3 Writing Homework
Prompt:
Imagine finding a mysterious key hidden under an old tree in your backyard. When you try to use it, something extraordinary happens.
Write a narrative (story) about what the key unlocks and the adventure that follows. You can use the characters and objects on this page OR you can make up your own.
Think about:
Who the main characters are and where they are.
What the key unlocks and the challenges it brings.
How the story will end.
Remember to:
Plan your story before you start.
Choose your words carefully.
Write in sentences.
Pay attention to spelling, punctuation, and paragraphs.
Check and edit your writing.
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- Due Date : January 10, 2025
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One Autumn day me and my sister were playing with bubbles. Saskia (my sister) started laughing so hard it brought a sound of joy to my ears. As I was blowing bubbles a cool gentle breeze pushed the bubbles onto my face! Saskia laughed so hard she tripped over a huge bump on the ground next the old oak tree. I helped her up off the ground and while she was wiping off wet dirt, I grabbed a thick stick that had fallen off from the old tree and started digging into the wet soil.
Later my sister grabbed a stick and started helping me dig until finally we saw a … shiny…..KEY! But it was a very ancient key. “Well there’s nothing to open using this key around here, so maybe we should sell it.” suggested Saskia. “NO! I shouted. “Lets look to see if there might be a key hole .” “Good idea!” Then on the other side of the oak tree we saw a bright, sparkly golden light shining which almost blinded the two of us. It was like magic drawing the two of us towards it. As we got closer I realised the light was coming from a keyhole on an old wooden door. “Do you know what this means?” I turned back asking her. “. . .no.” she replied in an unmotivated mood.” It’s an entrance to a magical land with adventures to come. ” I said to her. I took the old gold key and carefully unlocked the tree door. A rainbow light shone out towards me and Saskia’s face. As magic swirled deeper in my heart it felt as if I belonged here and it was inviting us. We started walking further into the magic.It was are little secret.
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DAY 3-Y3NAPLAN-Aanya – FEEDBACK
I was digging in front of an ancient Beech tree when my shovel hit something hard. I pulled it out with enormus strenth and in my hand lay a gold key with glistening gems. A wooden door I had never seen glittered in front of me. I pushed it open and stepped into a magical world. It had crystal flowers everywhere, fairies fluttering, magic wands floating in the air and butterflies.
One fairy came and said,” Hi my name is Bess. I show you the magic of flowers. ” I nodded. Bess picked a flower up and gave it to me. As soon as it touched my hand, it started to play soft music. WOW! Bess smiled and flew away.
I picked a wand from the air and it was warm like sunshine. I knew it was time to go home because the key melted in my hand. I said bye to Bess, opened the door and I was back to the normal world. What an adventure!
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DAY 3-Y3NAPLAN-Kiara Shah – FEEDBACK
One day while playing in my backyard. I found a shining key in my garden flower bed. The key was golden and shimmered in the dark soil, half buried among the flowers. I picked up the key, I felt a warm sensation rushing from my hands to my heart. The key glowed like a rainbow after a storm.
As I raised the key above me a magical doorway appeared in front of me like it was waiting for this moment. When I took the key a door came out of nowhere. The door was adorned with words that promised me treasure if I dared to open it.
There were words on the door that said open it and you will find treasure, so I opened the door and I found a new world and I went into the new world and I found trees can sing sweet melodies and sheep leap through the air like they were dancing on the clouds. Each moment was filled with wonder, and I realized that sometimes the greatest adventures are just a key turn away.
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Ethan – FEEDBACK
”Buzz!” My alarm clock jolted me awake. It was Saturday morning, and Jake had dragged me to Grandma’s backyard for his science project.” This is the oldest tree in the area,” he said pointing to the massive oak tree with twisted branches. Grandma had mentioned a key buried beneath it, which unlocked something extraordinary. After a few minutes of digging, Jake unearthed a golden key with swirling patterns that gleamed in the sunlight. Spotting a hidden panel in the bark, he slid the key into the lock. With a loud click, the ground trembled, and a staircase.
We descended into a cave glowing with crystals. At its centre was a pulsing orb on a pedestal. ”This is it!”Jake whispered, reaching out. The moment he touched it, a deep hum filled the air, and a massive stone guardian emerged, its glowing red eyes fixed on us. ”Adam, help!” Jake shouted as the guardian advanced. I spotted a carving on the wall, that matched the key, and turned it. The guardian froze and crumbled to dust, the orb floating back to the pedestal as the cavern stilled.
We climbed out just as the tree sealed itself behind us. Grandma was waiting on the porch, smiling knowingly. ” Did you find it?” she asked. Jake grinned, clutching his notebook. ” More than I expected,” he said, already planning his next adventure.
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