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Day 5 Writing Homework

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Prompt : Write both emails for the playground scenario:

Informal Email to Fellow Students: Gather support for your playground improvement campaign using informal tone
while maintaining a persuasive impact.

Formal Email to Principal: Request playground renovations using formal tone, persuasive evidence, and
emotive/descriptive language.

Requirements:
Include all email components (subject line through sign-off)
Use at least 5 examples of emotive language in each email
Include at least 5 examples of descriptive language in each email
Maintain appropriate register for each audience

Keep Formal email to 500-600 words
Keep Informal email to 500-600 words

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  4. Invincible

    Emails
    Email1
    Subject: Request for immediate actions for what’s called the doomsday playground.
    To: PrincipalHenderson.school.24564

    Dear Principal Henderson,
    A serious problem has been raised, many parents care for their Childs safety
    but when they’d see the kids playground, they would astonished, with their mouths open, on how dangerous it is. From the monkey bars, to the slides there is nothing which is entirely safe. Some parents may even file complaints, and I’m not lying the playground needs some serious renovations.

    Imagine a playground with improper made swings with monkey bars spiky enough to stab someone, cracked concrete, bad and faded markings for the basketball court with the suns heat feeling as its lacerating your skin this isn’t a fiction novel but the actual state of the school playground.

    Once vibrant and spirited, the playground is now a place of avoidance and disgrace. First of all, after having two whole sessions deliberate learning anybody would want a break, and from a recent school survey more than 70% of people visit playgrounds and basket ball courts in lunch and recess, which means, most of those kids will refuse to go to the playground as it is dangerous. With having that, the kids who refuse to play in the playground won’t get any leisure time to ease of all the burden on their shoulders, and if this continues there may be serious consequences.

    In order to make the playground more stunning you should first remove all harmful items, enhance equipment, make more shades and finally make it so that it catches ones eye this could be like decorating or planting flowers and trees once these renovations are done the playground would be more captivating than ever.

    Finally, Principal Henderson I kindly request for renovations to be made, which will make this a better school.

    Yours Sincerely,
    Pukhraj

    Email2

    Subject: Raising support for renovating school play ground

    To: Available to all year 6 students and class presidents

    We have all seen the condition of our lovely playground with the fields as crisp as potato chips and the loved monkey bars all just disgustingly rusted and the once tightened screws of the swing now loosened with no knowing when the entire thing gets broken up in to pieces, wouldn’t we all like our old playground to be restored?

    Just imagine a playground better than the one we all know with an eye catching look more benches, and especially more places for shade in hot sunny days. Remember all those annoying faded markings on the basketball court which conveniently helps the opposing team score an extra goal, well not anymore if we gather support we may be able to convince the principal to renovate the entire playground. Wouldn’t that be great?

    Take a look at the play ground, there are so many hazards like spiky metal bars which were railings, shaking platforms and damaged equipment. Some of these dangers can even injure someone.

    I strongly request you all to start raising support to convince Principal Henderson to start taking actions renovating dangerous items enhancing school equipment and even start decorating the play ground.

    Sincerely,
    Raised by Pukhraj

    Reply
  5. Preethika vishwanath nayak

    Mail 2
    Dear Mr Principal

    I am writing this because of the worsening condition of the School playground. I respectively request immediate renovations to fix the safety issue of the playground.

    As we all know, the School playground was the best place that we all knew but for the past few years it has been neglected, falsely used and was not maintained very well. A place where people played transformed into a hazardous landscape with jagged pieces of rusty metal scattered everywhere and puddles that are deep enough that a kid could trip on where people get hurt every day this place has not been cleaned and never been used since, the rusty metal cuts hands like knives and infects the hand

    Last week more than five people fell and got hurt in the playground the conditions are very poor. We need to renovate the school playground so it doesn’t have any more issues with kids. The school playgrounds do not even have any seats for kids. We must make sure that the kids get enough seats and must get enough play equipment for them to have fun. It is proven that schools that have play equipment are more likely to have more fit kid and less likelier chance of obesity than others. I want to
    Call action to make the school playground more safe, accessible and functional. This is issue is one of the main reasons why kids do not want to be involved with school activities. A new playground would help the students get more involved in school. Or do you want a playground that is dangerous

    The benefits of renovating the existing playground into a new one is way better than keeping the Old one the benefits of a new one is that not many people will get hurt or injured. The New equipment will be way better than just rickety, unstable, rusty and useless junk that we think is the playground is not safe and not up to Standard and the standards are very high. This problem has to stop and the children have to be know that they are in a safe space.

    The whole school really needs a new playground for the children to play with and but their is an another problem the seating areas for the kids there are not enough seating areas and the children have to sit down on the ground and it is a problem because of the dirt that is not hygienic the school’s seats are dirty and are not cleaned properly and usually the the children have to sit on the bench’s that are Allsop not comfortable os clean.

    Sincerely from Anvith in year 6

    Mail 2

    Hello i am Anvith i call for support from you so that we can have a new playground That’s better than the one that we have. Every day someone gets hurt in the new playground and this is a problem that we all know. Anyone who goes to play there gets hurt or falls down from the Rusty equipment. when we were a year One the playground was clean fun to play with, after a few years it was nothing like that. It was neglected. wasn’t clean properly or even maintained.

    So I call for help so that we can get what we want, and get rid of the Old playground. Every time I went there, it was horrific There were rusted bolts and pieces of metal everywhere, the and the rusty equipment that could cut clean through a foot, uneven ground that could trip a year six student and puddles that can trip even if you are careful. Is this what you want? A place where you can’t even take a step without getting hurt

    Jone from year four went there to play hide and seek yesterday almost all the kids that were hurt and one of them got a sharp rusty metal in his hand he had to go to the hospital, Jone got hurt really badly in the leg because she fell down and got a sharp piece of metal in the her leg even Doty said that even the outside of the playground area was damaged by the water and wind. After Doty saw Jone fall down she tried to get a teacher but she fell down from the uneven ground.

    The seats. We don’t have enough seats some are rotten and broken in half and the remaining seats are still dirty, unhygienic and covered in bird litter and haven’t been cleaned for years it seems. We have to seat on the ground and that is unhygienic that makes people sick and some times it is even worse and we have to on dirt some time. So i have plan that we can protest for the renovation of the of our playground and better facilities and seating area and extra staff so the kids can play without worrying that they might get hurt

    This school principal has been neglecting the students and what they deserve. The principle is not gonna listening to us if we we just ask this School isn’t up to Standard and not even Up to where normal schools are we have to make a choice to stay like this or stand up for ourselves so we get a better school playground and seats that we deserve.

    By Anvith from year 6
    Meat me at the playground on Monday
    Next week.

    Reply

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