Day 2 Writing Homework
Prompt : Revise your persuasive letter from Day 1 to incorporate the advanced techniques learned today:
Review and enhance the precision of your language throughout
Add at least three specific pieces of evidence (statistical, historical, expert opinion)
Include one paragraph that addresses and refutes a counterargument
Apply at least three advanced persuasive techniques from today’s lesson
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- Due Date : April 17, 2025
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Aaliyah Noor
42 Willowbank Drive
Roseville, NSW 2069
14 April 2025
Councillor Hang
Roseville Community Council
135 Civic Lane
Roseville, NSW 2069
Subject: Objection to the Proposed Demolition of Our Community Library
Dear Councillor Hang,
I write with a heavy heart, weighed down by deep sorrow and a profound sense of loss, regarding the council’s proposal to demolish our cherished community library—a decision that threatens to erase the cultural heartbeat of our suburb and replace it with a lifeless, soulless commercial structure.
As a student whose intellectual curiosity has flourished within the walls of this sanctuary, I feel compelled to voice my vehement opposition. The Roseville Library is not merely a building; it is a sanctuary for the curious, a haven for the hopeful, and a lighthouse for those seeking knowledge. Where else can students, like myself, find the quiet refuge necessary for study, the resources for academic growth, and the welcoming embrace of a space designed not for profit, but for progress?
The proposed demolition ignores the irreplaceable value this library holds. Consider this: a 2021 report by the Australian Library and Information Association (ALIA) found that for every dollar invested in public libraries, communities receive $4.30 in economic value. Furthermore, a 2023 national survey by the State Library of NSW revealed that over 70% of respondents consider their local library a critical part of their well-being and education. And historically, we need only look to the closure of 350 libraries in the UK between 2010 and 2020, which led to a measurable decline in youth literacy and community cohesion (BBC News, 2020).
The destruction of our library would not merely cause inconvenience—it would gouge a permanent wound in the collective soul of Roseville. Every book shelved within, every whisper of discovery made in its quiet corners, would be lost. Picture the scene: bulldozers—those steel-jawed monsters—devouring a place of peace and thought. Concrete cracking like bones. Glass shattering like dreams. Timber splintering like trust. Is that the legacy you wish to leave behind? A flattened shell where once stood a beacon of intellectual and cultural light?
Opponents of our cause may argue that digitisation renders physical libraries obsolete. But to this I say: information is not knowledge, and access is not experience. Digital platforms may offer convenience, but they cannot replicate the essence of shared learning spaces. Not everyone in our community has access to reliable internet or quiet study areas at home. Our library is a leveller—it offers equal access to education, opportunity, and community. To destroy it in favour of profit-driven development is not progress; it is regression disguised in glass and steel.
What must be protected is not just the structure, but what it symbolizes: history, continuity, and hope. Let me amplify this truth: our library inspires minds, empowers generations, and anchors our identity. Its loss would be not only a cultural tragedy but a civic failure of imagination and responsibility.
So I plead: do not let our community become another cautionary tale. Preserve the library not just for us, but for the generations yet to come—for the children who will one day discover their first book there, for the elderly who find companionship in its reading groups, for the dreamers who need only one quiet space to ignite their genius.
We must protect it because it matters.
We must protect it because it uplifts.
We must protect it because once it is gone, it cannot be replaced.
Yours with utmost urgency and hope,
Aaliyah Noor
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madiha – DAY 2
24 Simspon St, 2113 17 Bread St, 2112
14/4/24
Dear Council,
This letter is sent in regards of your descision to knock down our precious local library to support building some commercial building. Destroying the sacred building would not only destroy a valuble structure but also crumble the hearts of thousands living in this town. Would you commence the execution of a building that had captivated the hearts of many just to build yet another polluting, common, filthy structure? No other building, no matter how luxurious, can ever compete with the local library; a cataphony of books, sleek and modern, precious and ancient. I express my anguish and represent the town in our opinion in this matter. We all share this town. Sometimes leaders have to lead by counting in on the publics’ opinion.
The terrible destruction of the treasured library would tear a gaping hole in our hearts. A wound which would surely leave a scar. Knocking down this prized building will destroy an integral part of the city, just to build a common monstrosity? A survey shows that, in this town, 90% of people loved the library, and of the world population? 80%. Far less prefered some shopping centre over a precious library, and our town cares much for the library. Experienced librarian Keefe Sencen says that “Libraries are a reliable place for books – far more reliable than most commercial buildings. To knock one down would be near a crime.” The public cares plenty for this building. For some, it is a place to rest and recharge after a long day. There’s something wonderful about sinking into a beanbag, letting the weight of the day melt away as your mind drifts quietly elsewhere. For others, it is a haven — a space to escape the noise of the world, to breathe, to think, and to simply be. Whether it’s used to unwind or to find focus, this space holds power beyond its walls: it becomes a reflection of comfort, clarity, and calm. To destroy it would to be to destroy a place where people turn to in need, to destroy a beloved building.
Some people may say that shopping centres create jobs and convienient places to shop. First of all, libraries create satisfactory, engaging jobs people can actually enjoy rather than a tedious job which gives just barely enough pay to survive. For another, libraries are an easy access to books – far easier than spending hours just trying to find the right store. Unlike shopping centres, there are people to guide you through getting around the library to find exactly what you need. The library holds an average of over 1,200 people per day, providing essential resources unique to libraries. Shopping centres hold short-term convienience; libraries possess wisdom lasting a thousand lifetimes.
The library is a safe haven at any time, whether its the day, where quiet streams of sunlight stretch through the open windows like slender fingers, or the night, where the cool rays of moonlight gently light the room. It is a place of peace, a maze of ancient carved bookshelves with books, modern and ancient, sitting there, inviting readers to come. The unique smell of the library is irreplaceable, the perfect blend of the crisp paper and smooth leather of books, and the natural musty smell of the shelves. The only sounds are the quiet sound of flipping pages – other than that, a peaceful, serene silence. The library is a unique, special building which has captivated the hearts of thousands. It has educated our minds, become a quiet sanctuary, and forged bonds stronger than ever. Would you really want to destroy this place?
Don’t make a terrible mistake when the public has been warning you, before you are left with the legacy of a loss and regret piles up in your heart. Don’t make the same error many did before you. Don’t crush the hearts of the population and lost their trust.
You have started this. But it is not too late to stop it.
Don’t be remembered as the executioner of a precious place, but revered as the saviour of a sacred sanctuary
It’s not too late – yet.
Yours in concern,
Jordan Wong
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Lily Moore
2 ABC Street
Randwick 2220
New South Wales, Australia
15th April 2025
Councillor Alexander Smith
3 XYZ Road
Waverly 2330
New South Wales, Australia
Dear Mr. Smith,
I am writing to you, to talk about the proposed new shopping mall project. As a student who values knowledge, the local library is a sanctuary for storing cultural and intellectual gems. Like me, other people also treasure this library, and if you decide to demolish the town’s beloved library, many of us will be devastated. I would like you to reconsider moving the project to another sight, where no library will be destroyed, and this is why.
Libraries are crucial
According to a recent survey of our community, 87% respondents chose libraries over shopping centres. This establishes that the majority of our township prefers a library, to a shopping complex, because people can learn without having to pay a fee to go in and read or use resources, and it is a safe place for the community to congregate and socialise. While shopping centres may offer economic benefits, they cannot replace the profound societal impact of a space dedicated to learning and creativity.
Alton Library holds Priceless Memoires
From stone carvings, to manuscripts, to first edition books, our local library provides Randwick a variety of knowledge. Opened in 1954, by our late Queen Elizabeth, this library holds a cultural significance. If you demolish this sacred haven, all these precious books, irreplaceable artifacts, prized letters and its history will no longer have a home. ‘A room without books, is a body without a soul.’ A famous saying, quoted by Marcus Tullius Cicero. Hundreds of hearts are bound to break, hearing the news of our library being destroyed. So, what is the point of building a shopping centre when what is already there holds so much value to our community?
People learn new things from libraries
From discovering new theories, to working new technologies, to studying equations, the library has immense potential power to uplift, providing tools for people to expand their knowledge. “Learning is like opening new doors for people to get smarter.” Says Professor Michel Williams at his latest lecture on civilisation. With libraries, their legacy will indefinitely last for decades to come. Do you not realise that you are ruining generations of knowledge, if you build a new shopping centre here?
Books transport you to another world
Books are a large component of libraries. The latest study by Doctors Martin Neil and Julia Johnson confirmed that across Australia, 79% prefer reading at night, rather than staring at a screen. Whether it is a newspaper, or picture book, these prized books are crucial to us. Where will people turn to read if there is no library?
In conclusion, I believe that if you decide to demolish our sacred library, many of our hearts will break, whether it is from no more books, not being able to experience learning anything new, or the significance of losing priceless memories. Studies also show that many people across Australia love reading, but if you still have not changed your mind, could you consider allocating a space in the building, for a new library, so we can balance the needs of our community?
Sincerely,
Lily Moore
-Amelie
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Winni – DAY 2
Dear: Council Cyrilia road Sydney NSW
456 Kent St Sydney NSW
14/4/2025
It has come to the attention of myself that the council is planning to demolish the community library to make way for a measly shopping center. In everyone’s opinion, this is an abhorrent idea, destroying a sanctuary of peace and learning to replace it with a loud realm of greenhouse gasses and CFCs. You may as well be signing the death warrant of intelligence. Anyone can see how much the public adores the library, and how it is the reason behind our intelligent community. Surely you can see that. If you destroyed the library, you would be destroying the bond between our community and everything we love. You would destroy who we are!
First of all, I must say that we are in utter shock and disarray at why you want to destroy such a beautiful place. It is an ethereal place of knowledge and power. Its books invite you with its quiet finger of curiosity, forcing you to open the pages to an entirely new world. No one would ever dream of destroying this landmark in history. Think of it as if you were to destroy your favourite photos of your dead grandma. That is how we feel about you destroying our majestic library of knowledge and secrets. An argument on your side might be that it is old and the wood is rotting, and that your shopping center will have better income. While that is true, it will only be so for a short period. For as research presented by professor Shwabudy says, “libraries are the main source of income for any community, approximately $2.1 million” said he, “whilst also providing a safe haven for learning”. Another piece presented was that “many a shopping center have shut down due lack of income after 5-6 years. As many people have reported, “it seemed to lose its authenticity after a while.” Thus forcing it to shut down
Ensuingly, destroying the library would destroy any trust the community has in you, meaning that your life would be 10 times harder. Even without the added grief of destroying a magnificent placeholder in our history such as this. You as an entity are nothing without the people. Yet the people are nothing without the library. So you are nothing without the library. If you destroy our library, we won’t listen. If you destroy our library nothing will go ahead. If you destroy our library, you will regret it. It would just be ignorant, selfish and conceited. No one will ever listen to you again, not even your ministers.
So please, please don’t knock down this marvellous bibliotheca. I understand your point of view but make sure that you always think clearly without being clouded with money fantasies, then, and only then, will you be happy, and the people will be happy. The people are you and the library is the people. Save the library, save yourself, destroy the library, destroy yourself. Bear all that in mind for a few weeks and Let’s see what happens.
Yours sincerely: Lincoln
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Dear Council, as a student who has been nurtured by the library’s profound benefits, I propose that you do not go forth with the demolition of our cherished library. The library is extremely prestigious to our society and is found to be extremely exclusive. The library displays a sign of peace and welcoming. Would you want to be the one responsible for destroying this priceless artifact? It truly would be a disappointment, an atrocity, a disgrace to crush everyone’s most dearest setting. Mr Council, you shouldn’t take down this masterpiece. Taking the library down is almost detrimental to the public as the library stands as a spot for peace, learning, thrills, and many others. The library is like a second home for some souls, and it would be heartbreaking and devastating if it were taken away from them.
Taking the library will massively impact our community, stealing all the peace and quietness that the library maintained. If someone were to be able to make the library better instead of taking it away, it most definitely would be you council! The urge to take the library away may be tempting however, the fact that damage definitely will be made is honestly disrespectful. Although the library could have some development and progress in its structure the library is still very much in a good condition. Taking something that is extremely important to the community, not only deprives the community’s trust but will also make the community lack its most famous setting. When hearing about taking down the library it feels like being stabbed in the chest, like losing something that is extremely important towards not only myself, but to everyone else.
Although some may argue that a modern shopping complex may be beneficial in some ways such as things like employment and more money generation. However having a complex shopping center also maintains many disadvantages such as maintenance which could be very much costly. Whilst if the library demolition proceeds it could also be extremely expensive. Professor Jamal Simmey , a professor at Harvard University has claimed “ Reading even one page of a book a day could lead to major success in the future.” In another suburb called Sabinia demolished their local library and the local school had noticed that some of the fellow students had a major decline in their learning and growth. Results have shown that the students’ growth has gone down by 39 percent in just a time of 3 months. These terrible results should not happen to some of the kids at our local schools.
As someone who has been found to be included in the growth of learning by the library, this letter comes sincerely, straight from my heart and I am begging you Mr Council with this appeal to let me, and everyone else in the community, continue to enjoy this library. Taking the library will extinguish the most valuable thing we have and also extinguish our trust in you. This letter is written with the utmost respect and humility from one of your fellow citizens of the wonderful community.
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Skylette – DAY 2
Dear Councillor Jacob,
It has come to my attention that the council has proposed the demolition of our beloved community library in replacement with a spiritless, lacklustre commercial mess. As a student whose life has been built around these eloquent and accessible books, I find a need to express my passionate disapproval. Our library isn’t just a mere building – it is a compassionate haven where people of all ages can learn and grow. Would it be justified to value money over the education of our students and community? To ruin our sacred library space is to ruin the hearts of this community as a whole. I plead you to take some time to re-evaluate this heartbreaking decision – one that threatens to erase the memories that have formed within this building.
Some may argue that the use of technology provides us with e-books and audio books. While this is a valid arguement, I believe that the simple convienence of our traditional books is something e-books will never have. To read on e-books, one must search for their device, wait until they have good reception, and then will have to read on a laggy screen. Whereas, if our library wasn’t demolished, we would be able to just read no matter when or where it was.
Imagine bulldozers and cranes ravaging through the debris of our library mercilessly, reducing it to just a meagre memory. Picture the monstrous machines, their steel limbs tearing through the books, shattering the glass, and crushing the stone, swallowing this beacon of knowledge whole. Each roar of their engines would drown out the laughter of our community. This is not just a demolition, it’s an erasure of our community.
Our library is an extravagant building, delicately and intricately crafted with the finest details. Many architects, engineers, and constructors worked for years to bring this structural masterpiece to life – building the large arches, placing down each brick, and creating glowing artworks using stained glass. Elliot, a builder who assisted in the making of this library said, “It was a pleasure to work on such a masterpiece. To see it go, I wouldn’t be able to bear it.” To replace this place of grandeur with an uninspiring structure made of metal beams and concrete would be to erase their hard work. It would be a waste of beauty, effort, and creativity in favour of commerical monotony.
I ask you to reconsider this decision. Imagine our future where, instead of spending time with vanilla-tinged paper filled to the brim with stories and the imagination of others, children try out the latest perfumes at the shops. A world where, instead of listening to the calming sounds of paper turning, the continous beeps of the librarian’s scanner, and the soft scratches of pencil on paper, kids get overstimulated by other’s chatting and music blasting in their ears. This is what replacing our library with a mall will do. Students will never get to expierence the joy of stuffing your head in a book, reading to your heart’s desire. Our community deserves more than just a commerical building. Future generations will look back at your decision. Although I am just a student, I beseech you to make the right decision.
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