Day 2 Writing Homework
Prompt :Revise your persuasive letter from Day 1 to incorporate the advanced techniques learned today:
Review and enhance the precision of your language throughout
Add at least three specific pieces of evidence (statistical, historical, expert opinion)
Include one paragraph that addresses and refutes a counterargument
Apply at least three advanced persuasive techniques from today’s lesson
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- Due Date : April 17, 2025
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smruthim – DAY 2
Dear Council Members,
This choice is more than just a simple decision—it is a turning point. This choice cannot stand. This choice cannot be justified. This choice cannot be forgiven. By deciding to destroy our community’s library, you are doing more than removing walls and shelves. You are removing a lifeline for students. You are removing a sanctuary for readers. You are removing a bridge to opportunity for families and individuals who depend on this vital institution.
You are choosing to tear apart a space that has been the heart of this community. You are choosing to ignore the needs of students who find guidance and resources within the library walls. You are choosing to deny families a place where stories are shared, knowledge is discovered, and bonds are built. Is this truly the vision of progress?
The library is more than a building. It is a haven for those who seek knowledge but cannot afford private tutors. It is a home for students from disadvantaged backgrounds who need a quiet place to study and access free resources. Did you know that in Australia, public libraries hosted over 3.5 million participants in programs and facilitated more than 146 million instances of collection usage in just one year? Additionally, libraries provided over 4.8 million hours of free Wi-Fi access, ensuring digital inclusion for those who might otherwise be left behind. What happens when these vital services are taken away? What happens to the dreams of the child who sees the library as a stepping stone to their future? What happens to the identity of a community when its cultural hub is torn down?
This is not just a loss for the present generation; it is a loss for every generation to come. The library is a repository of knowledge. The library is a symbol of equality. The library is a testament to the power of education and community. By tearing it down, you are sending a message: that profit is more important than people, that commerce is more valuable than culture, and that short-term gains outweigh long-term Have you considered the environmental costs? Have you thought about the pollution, the carbon emissions, and the loss of green spaces that come with this decision? Have you thought about what it will mean to walk through a town filled with cars, concrete, and skyscrapers, devoid of the color and vibrancy that makes it truly unique? Is this what you want our community to become?
You might argue that a shopping complex will boost the economy or create jobs, and perhaps it will—for now. But storefronts can pop up anywhere. Libraries, however, cannot be so easily replaced. Libraries are investments in people. Libraries create pathways to success. Libraries nurture a community’s soul in a way no shopping mall ever can. Even the wealthiest among us—business leaders, Nobel laureates, and innovators—often point to public libraries as places that shaped their early lives and their futures.
You have the power to protect this library. You have the power to uphold the values of education, equity, and opportunity. You have the power to choose a legacy of progress, wisdom, and inclusion. The library is not just a building. It is hope. It is history. It is the heart of our community.
Choose to preserve it. Choose to fight for what matters. Choose to be remembered as the council that stood with its people, not against them. This is more than just a decision; it is a reflection of who we are and who we aspire to be. Do the right thing—not just for today, but for the countless tomorrows that lie ahead.
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Farzana – DAY 2
Dear Council,
I demand the library shall not be demolished after all its the only visceral place in the entire suburb.
The library is the most prodigious residence as it holds many popular events, it’s a place where euphoria gathers, and now it’s going to be demolished! Why would anyone do such an insolent thing? Removing the local library is like destroying an innocent persons house.
The library is an old heritage building full of knowledge and vivacity, as this building stands for over a 120 years, what advantage will be earned after destroying the building? The library teaches many good values, while if the library gets demolished more people will go to shopping centre where bad habits and values can be picked up, they could be greed, temporary happiness and people might even become spend thrifts or materialistic.
As I said before, the library holds many events like community gatherings, chess competitions, and children’s poem reading. If the library gets destroyed they’d be nothing like that. Once the building is destroyed, the air would be humid of all the melancholy feelings, the suburb would be dread with no sign of hope as the only eye catching place would be destroyed. As the air gets hotter and hotter no one would care as they have already beared a significant loss.
Destroying the library also means you’re going to destroy all the memories made within it and this can affect many people mentally, and why would anyone want the worst of someone else? If the library gets demolished many people wouldn’t have accessibility over books especially people who can’t afford them and also those who aren’t that tech savvy rely on books.
Once you and the council have read my following arguments you may say,
“After reading the above paragraph the council and I have raised some questions and things we want you to think about, Why do we need a library when there are so many events held in shopping centres? People mostly buy books from shops.” Well the council may be right, but it still wouldn’t change the fact that the library is a beloved place, its like a second home to many others.
Finally, as a concerned citizen I humbly ask the student council not to demolish the local library as it’s a vital heritage to this suburb.
Sincerely,
Pukhraj
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Invincible – DAY 2
Dear Councillor Thompson, I am writing to you today to express my profound concern and distress regarding the upcoming demolition of our beloved Townsville Library. Even the thought of our library that has been this town’s rock for generations, bringing people together and hosting community events, being torn down for the pure greed of construction companies, sends a chill down my spine. I urge you to rethink this pivotal decision that could shatter our community spirit, leaving a gaping whole in our town’s sense of self. Why build yet another monolithic structure disguised as a mall, that echoes greed and overconsumption, instead of leaving our library be? Today,I will be telling you how our library has a vast amount of historical significance towards the people of Townsville, and how an immense library that bears knowledge and books encourages youth to read and educate themselves.
Our library has been in this town for generations to come, and destroying it would be like ripping away the souls of children and adults, past and present, splinter by splinter. Our cries of pain and helplessness will be drowned out by the affluent and greedy, who would much prefer a shopping centre over a library. However, the fact that individuals enjoy indulging in materialistic bliss itself, is not the problem, it’s the fact that companies are willing to demolish centuries worth of knowledge for that. Picture this- the photo frame of the Townsville Library founder hangs on the library’s azure, earthen walls, yet the drilling, hammering, and crashing of hammers, drills, and chainsaws is pressure enough to shatter the glass frame, cracking its historical significance. Dr Sarah Chen, expert child psychologist stated that children need at least 2 role models in their life, excluding family, to look up to. The founder and friendly librarians can fit that role perfectly in countless ways that retail workers cannot. The sounds of the drills and hammers that you hear, aren’t simply breaking through the walls and doors of our sacred building, they are penetrating through our cultural history like shadows lengthening at sunset, slowly replacing it with consumerism and pure material goods. Moreover, the demolition of a library for a shopping centre occured in our neighbouring town, and a poll conducted reported a 17% decline in community spirit and happiness in the town.
Picture this- an underprivileged child goes to the library, to borrow the study materials he needs, yet when they walks to the library, they notice that their beloved library that has supported their education even in times of need, has been replaced by a towering shopping mall, and now, they would need to pay for the materials that they might not be able to afford. If the upcoming demolition of our library is executed, this could become a reality for many students in Townsville. However, you might say “This statement could be completely invalid if the percentage of children in Townsville is low”. However, in contrast to what the public may think, Townsville’s population is comprised of 26% children. When such a staggering statistic, that almost 1 in 4 people in Townsville are children, wouldn’t you want to maximise children’s opportunities for growth and success? Moreover, a study conducted in Harvard university in 2021 showed that children’s behaviour and actions are influenced by what they are exposed to in their childhood. If we apply that study to Townsville, the upcoming shopping centre, and the library, it is clear that if we keep our library, it will expose children to humility, knowledge, education, and equality, but if we expose them to a shopping centre, it will introduce them to consumerism, greed, inequality, and the fact that money can buy happiness. However, you are also right to state the benefits of a shopping centre, and how it will boost our town’s economic growth, and provide job opportunities. Although a library can definitely not do that, it presents children with much more valuable learning opportunities, making it a more important investment than a shopping centre.
To conclude, while building a shopping centre will, without a doubt bear short term benefits, such as retail therapy, and economic growth,
I am certain that a library will provide tomorrow’s leaders with the resources they need to excel in life, in the long term.
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Radhika Modak – DAY 2
Dear Councillor Thompson, I am writing to you today to express my profound concern and distress regarding the upcoming demolition of our beloved Townsville Library. Even the thought of our library that has been this town’s rock for generations, bringing people together and hosting community events, being torn down for the pure greed of construction companies, sends a chill down my spine. I urge you to rethink this pivotal decision that could shatter our community spirit, leaving a gaping whole in our town’s sense of self. Why build yet another monolithic structure disguised as a mall, that echoes greed and overconsumption, instead of leaving our library be? Today,I will be telling you how our library has a vast amount of historical significance towards the people of Townsville, and how an immense library that bears knowledge and books encourages youth to read and educate themselves.
Our library has been in this town for generations to come, and destroying it would be like ripping away the souls of children and adults, past and present, splinter by splinter. Our cries of pain and helplessness will be drowned out by the affluent and greedy, who would much prefer a shopping centre over a library. However, the fact that individuals enjoy indulging in materialistic bliss itself, is not the problem, it’s the fact that companies are willing to demolish centuries worth of knowledge for that. Picture this- the photo frame of the Townsville Library founder hangs on the library’s azure, earthen walls, yet the drilling, hammering, and crashing of hammers, drills, and chainsaws is pressure enough to shatter the glass frame, cracking its historical significance. The sounds of the drills and hammers that you hear, aren’t simply to breaking through the walls and doors of our sacred building, they are penetrating through our cultural history like shadows lengthening at sunset, slowly replacing it with consumerism and pure material goods. Moreover, the demolition of a library for a shopping centre occured in our neighbouring town, and a poll conducted reported a 17% decline in community spirit and happiness in the town.
Picture this- an underprivileged child goes to the library, to borrow the study materials he needs, yet when they walks to the library, they notice that their beloved library that has supported their education even in times of need, has been replaced by a towering shopping mall, and now, they would need to pay for the materials that they might not be able to afford. If the upcoming demolition of our library is executed, this could become a reality for many students in Townsville. However, you might say “This statement could be completely invalid if the percentage of children in Townsville is low”. However, in contrast to what the public may think, Townsville’s population is comprised of 26% children. When such a staggering statistic, that almost 1 in 4 people in Townsville are children, it goes without saying that if we keep our library, it will propel students further in their academic success, making the library a valuable asset to our community. Dr Sarah Chen, a youth psychologist conducted a study that reported that children are 2.3 times more likely to do or follow what they are influenced by, or exposed to. The choice is left in your hands, would you rather expose children to a shopping centre that would introduce them with destructive concepts such as greed and consumerism, or continue presenting children with a library that echoes with knowledge and education? While shopping centres are also undeniably valuable to our community, in the fact that they will boost economic growth, I believe that the benefits of our town library far outweighs mere financial success.
To conclude, while shopping centres definitely bear short term benefits such as providing customers with retail therapy and economic growth, I believe that the Townsville library will reap slow, but effective benefits such as education, humility and personal growth in children that will help tomorrows leaders excel in the long term.
Dear Hills Council,
You might have not found enough reasons in my letter from last time to stop the destruction of the library but today im gonna try and change your opinion on it. Ok I will admit that swapping the library isn’t really a bad idea because we will finally have a local shopping centre to go and shop at rather than having to go all the way to a different place to buy basic groceries. Many businesses would thrive as well because they can spread their customer base. Companies can earn more money which can boost the economy.
But I have evidence that the library is important. Well mutiple studies have shown that students that actually go to the library to study have seen a drastic increase in academic performance of 42%. Students need a quiet place to do studies and if they have a place to focus on studies then they will go from one of the worst performing student to an academic weapon. Imagine the wide grin across a student feeling happy that all their work at the library paid off. Are you cruel enough to take that smile off the students?
20 years back I remember that there was a study that came to our community and checked the literacy and the studies said that it was around 70% which is really low. The studies recommended to go to the library for those that still need to learn literacy. Everyone in the town agreed and they came back a week to see if we improved and the studies told us that the communities literacy is 94%. That is a drastic increase and the library helped that rate to go up because people that didn’t have literacy skills went there every day. Dr Dre, one of the best professors in the world came to the library to see what books are there that give information to people. He read over 500 books and said that they were all accurate with data and that this library is one of the best libraries in the city. “Most libraries have information that was correct a few years or weren’t even accurate but this library is perfect. All the facts are accurate and up to date.” Dr Dre recited.
This community was established in the Victorian era. Knights would come to the library to get some books to study the strategies that their enemies used win battles. Well when they read those books they learnt the strategies of their opponents the started winning battles and were the strongest army of all armies of that time. The library has some of the most important books that were written to help the community in case something happens that destroys it. One of the manscripts have the cities laws and it’s the only law book that was every written for this city. This can drastically increase crimes as police will forget law and lawyers will not remember if what their customer did is illegal.
Please take these things into account and come to talk to the community and we will discuss what to do with the library.
Yours Sincerly,
Community of Rouse Hill
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Hasti Kafash Zadeh – DAY 2
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ryankhov – DAY 2
Stop The Library Getting Demolished
Hello, I am Anvith. Today I am going to tell you why we must stop the library from getting demolished. We all know that the library has been the heart and soul of the community seence the start and through the good and the bad, gust to get demolishd at the end for a mall! Heres three good resonse why we shoulden’t demolish it.
The history of the library is truly estonising. It is the oldest building the town it was built when the community was started, it has gone through unimaganeble thing, unchanged from the start. Has thought many people how to do thing, inspiaring genatrations to chase their dreams and achive them and gust to get killed for a mall is heart breaking for the howl community and the people how love the library as much as I do. Its hitorical signifcans, the humunges impact on the community and th magor rolls it’s played over the years.
The educational impacts, the library has played a humungus role in the educational system and has helped build the community and without it we all woulden’t be here and there is more than that if there were no library how can childern and adults learn new thing if they needed to how would they find it, many people find thing like books for their problems and questions in the library like how to did they build the london brige. So, if you disroyed the library you are distroying the whole community imagin someone is trying to distroy your houes how whold you react will you try to stop them.
The significance of the library is the most important of all. It teaches younger genarations and inspiers them. It is going to be horrific if a town dosen’t even have a library if the role is gone. How would the younger genarations know what they whan’t in life and what path they want to take in the futer. Imagin the younger genarations that don’t even know what they whan’t to be come. A mall is opposite the library. People want to go to a mall if they don’t whan’t to learn to study. It is stuped that the counsel thinks that mall is better than a library.
In conclusion it is better to keep our communites heart and sole that inspiers peopl to do things that they want to do. The library must never be riplaced by a mall or anything.
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Preethika vishwanath nayak – DAY 2
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amoghbir – DAY 2