Day 6 Writing Homework
Prompt: Write two persuasive emails about the playground renovation:
A formal email to your local council member requesting inspection and support (300-350 words)
An informal email to a local business owner requesting sponsorship (300-350 words)
Each email must include:
At least two examples of figurative language (metaphor, simile, personification)
Strong emotionally evocative language
Vivid physical descriptions that engage at least three senses
Clear adaptation to the specific audience
Proper email structure
500-600 Words
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- Due Date : April 23, 2025
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Subject Line: Danger to Students – The Old Playground
Dear Council Member,
A playground is an essential part of the communityy; it allows for students to get recess exercise, establish friendships, and learn invaluable social skills for a growing and changing student body. However, with the current condition of the playground, students leave frustrated, and even worse, there come back with safety concerns. And they are not the only ones. It’s easy to see how much rust coats any equipment- so much so that I had to write an email to you about it. As School Leader of The Committee Council, everyone came with their concerns.
Students have come to me expressing their concerns about the equipment and cracked pavement or lack of play structures that encourage play. The swings creak with no one on them, the slide is faded and rough, and there are many areas of the playground that show disrepair. Where there used to be sounds of laughter and energy on a warm day now is a boring, unsafe, and unappealing place to spend playtime.
Studies have shown that play and physical exercise contribute greatly to the cognitive and emotional development of children. Therefore, a renovated playground not only provides students with access to active play, but also teaches them about teamwork, group collaboration, problem-solving, and overcoming Obstacles. Without a renovation attempt, students are basically left with a playground set that does not meet their developmental needs and recreational desires.
We intend to add new equipment in exchange for outdated options, resurface areas that are cracked and present safety issues, and include equipment that boasts sensory integration options, as well as shaded seating options. Not only will this create a safe, inclusive, inviting atmosphere of play, but constant engagement from students of all ages.
Furthermore, a safe playground will encourage healthy developments within a school community that values such holistic growth. This will ensure that the playground is used for its natural intentions and fosters not only physical inclusion, but also emotional stability, as students are able to play, destress, and recharge during critical downtime. They deserve refuge that is comfortable and safe for their well-being.
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smruthim – DAY 6
Email to Local Council – Aaheli Saha
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EMAILS 2.0
Email1
Subject: To request inspect on school playground.
To: MemberCouncil.gmail.com.au
Dear Local Council,
Conceptualise, a school playground with its monkey bars rotting, the once bright yellow slide fainted in colour looking as if it was a hundred years old, the creeking floorboards as loud as can be, cracked concrete making the playground even worser, faded markings on the basketball court and worst of all the sunlight digging right into your skin with there being limited shade for all students during summer this isn’t a 2 star rated school but one of the good rated.
Even having one step in the playground can give any one shivers with no knowing of the cruel traps laid beneath the ground. Playing in the playground is a moment of pure misery. From running to playing there no greater sense of dread, the beautiful flowers and trees now swaying around, its petal and branches now dull in colour.
Just a few moths ago 8 year old Anthony Carlos was on swings going up and down when the swing broke and the kid fell to the ground stating he heard his arm crack, he had done an X-ray and the boy found out he had fractured his elbow, his future dreams of becoming a tennis player now savagely destroyed.
Another one of the many great problems are that if the playgrounds grass is to big it may become a good habitat for many creatures. This can become a problem as creatures may harm many children and many serious situations.
Finally, I request the local council to inspect the school and raise support by giving someone the responsibility to help the school become a better place. Just imagine how many times better the playground will become once it is renovated with nothing to worry about.
Sincerely,
Pukhraj
Email 2
Subject: For a sponsorship to the school.
To: Business owner Maverick ( Maverick2456.gmail.com.au. )
Hello, Maverick as you have probably guessed by subject, I am writing this Email to hopefully convince you to sponsor the school as its playground is in horrendous condition, loose platforms, sharp metal rods already rotting within the darkness one cut and its over, holes in the ground where there used to be plants not dug out by the roots.
The playground should be a place of leisure, socialising and playing but if the playground and the equipment given is bad than it would be difficult for kids to embrace their restlessness and energy if that’s taken from them kids will probably overtime get anxiety and stress.
If you, Maverick, raise sponsorship or even raise a bit of money for the school the principal may even start renovating the playground and it will became an overall better place, kids won’t get hurt.
Imagine the dark and mischievous playground becoming better the dead trees now in a fluffy bundle of leaves, the disgusting rotting monkey bars now sparkling in the day, more benches added and the touch of the coloured walls spreading its freshness throughout you. The once annoying faded lines on the basketball court now renewed, all this can happen just by sponsoring the school.
Hopefully because of all the above arguments I have successfully convinced you to raise some money and I kindly ask you to sponsor the school as it will help make the school a more safe and enjoyable place.
Regards,
Pukhraj
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Invincible – DAY 6
Mail1
To a local council member
From Anvith,
Today we have a problem that is the old school playground. That old school playground is rusty, scary and Old playground that is getting people hurt all the time. I have gone to this School for six years. At the start of my time here is was a fun place that look beautiful Butt after a few years it looked nothing like that. It had turned into an absolute mess there was rusty bolts and pieces of metal that were every where. The equipment is held on by one metal rod that can break any time and tip over and fall. Every time i go there i get a little nervous or worried.
As I know that you can at the most help me and the community and fix the issue that affects the Wellbeing of the children and the future people and renovate the schools playground to fit the highest standards of today. Imagine if you were praised your sincerity and for your consideration for others and the community and putting things field.
The problem is that the principal is neglecting the student and the school. That’s why the playground is so badly damaged and the people ignoring the Signs. That’s not the only problem. Kids are getting hurt and injured like Jone she fell from the equipment and injured her leg and she had to go to the hospital.
We can collaborate and we can make our community stronger, better and
More resilient for the future and make a better life for children in this community. This problem is not only is present in the school but it is also present in other schools and communities. So we can change and make sure that students get enough education and get fit and have a safe environment and space that they can trust where they don’t get hurt.
Mail2
To businesses owner
From Anvith
Help it is urgent. As you know the school is a safe space but there is a problem in my school their is a playground that looked amazing and had a bigger slide. But after a few years turned into a dark, Erie place that wasn’t safe with rusted metal everywhere and sharp bits that could cut through a hand. Just a few years it turned from a beautiful place into a rustic, destroyed and highly dangerous place.
The problem is that many people are getting hurt really badly like Lenny a two weeks ego she and her friends when’t to the for hide and seek tips. But there was a big incident the friends got injured when they tried to climb up the equipment and Lenny fell down and cut her leg open because of a sharp piece of metal. This is usually happening and it is unfortunate, unexpected./ the playground is definitely dangerous and highly neglectful and not being treated very well. This problem is going on in an our School playground with no supervision and no signs telling you it is unsafe what if a year one student gets badly hurt or even injured there will be no to see the whole incident.
I want you to be our sponsor and help us make sure that children get a good, safe and healthy environment so that we can make sure they get a good education and can be more fun in the process. This is not gust a good idea it is good for the community and the future of the community and the people. This is not the only problem for a school not having enough money is one of the problems that education system struggles with. So let’s be the first step.
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Preethika vishwanath nayak – DAY 6
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Saifan – DAY 6